Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

it can be noticed quite easly in graph the number of first time visitor to Caryl island strarts from 8000 in 2000 while the number of visitors has been increased to 12000 in 2008

on ther hand the grapgh shows that there are only 2000 returing visitor in the year 2000 although it has been increased ipto 15 thousands in 2006

as for as first time visitors are concerned intitaily it was such huje number around 8000 in 2000 but suddenly it has been strarted decreasing in year 2002 and afterwards around in year 2005 slightly new visitors started to move towrds island which shows postive sign and in the end in 2008 the number jumbed to 12000.

moreover the returning visitors were around 3000 in starting year so gradually number has been enhanced by the 2002 up to 10000 and 12000 in the 2004 respectively

howere this number clicked to it's peak in 2006 as around 15000 visitors have been returned but in the end in 2008 the number has been decreased to 13000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two visitor groups and report several important movements, including the rise in returning visitors to a peak in 2006 and their subsequent decline. However, the response only partially summarises the graph: it lacks a clear overview of the main pattern, and some figures or descriptions are inaccurate. First-time visitors fell to about 4,000 in 2002, then rose to roughly 11,800 by 2008, rather than simply “jumbed to 12000”; returning visitors began at about 3,000, not 2,000, and reached around 13,400 in 2008, not 13,000. The claim that first-time visitors began rising around 2005 also does not match the labelled years. Select the key trends accurately and state them clearly in an overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some organisation: it first introduces the two groups, then discusses first-time visitors and returning visitors in separate sections. Linking phrases such as “on the other hand” and “moreover” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is not consistently clear, and the opening does not provide a concise overview of the graph’s main features. Some links are inaccurate or awkward, while repeated references to the same trends make the account feel list-like. The long final section on returning visitors also combines several stages without clear sentence boundaries. Use a clear overview followed by one paragraph for each series, and connect each change in chronological order with precise, varied transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “increased,” “decreasing,” “peak,” and “decreased,” so the reader can generally understand the intended movements. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “the number of visitors has been increased,” “number has been enhanced,” and “visitors have been returned.” Frequent spelling errors—including “easly,” “grapgh,” and “returing”—also make the writing less clear and weaken control of vocabulary. Choose standard graph-description phrases and check spelling carefully. For example, describe figures as “rose,” “fell,” or “reached a peak,” rather than using “enhanced” or saying visitors “have been returned.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to form longer sentences using clauses and connectors, for example, “although it has been increased…” and “which shows…” This shows some effort to go beyond simple statements. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in tense, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. Examples include “the number … has been increased,” “in the year 2000,” and the run-on construction beginning “howere this number clicked to it's peak.” The response also shifts between past and present forms when describing completed years. Practise writing short, accurate past-tense comparisons first, then combine them with correctly punctuated clauses. Consistent sentence control would make the trends much easier to follow.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.