Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph represents the number of first time visitors and returing visitors in cary island over the time period of eight years.

It is noticeable that, the number of first time visitors rose drastically.

Looking at the figure, the number of two type of visitors . In the beginning, The count of first time visitors face drop in first two years by almost 4000 units and after that it start climb little smoothly by around 2000 units in second two years and later first time visitors rate increase unpredicabely by almost 7000 units.

Furthermore,in the period of first two annual the number of returing visitors rose dramatically by around 8000 units and after that it shows a little smooth growth by 2000 units in the second two years like later on returing watchers population climbed significantically by almost 4000 units in next two annuals, later this the returing watchers fall dramatically by around 2000 units on last two years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both visitor groups and describe several broad movements, including the initial fall in first-time visitors and the rise and later decline in returning visitors. However, the overview is too limited: “first time visitors rose drastically” misses that returning visitors were higher for most of the period and peaked in 2006. Some figures and comparisons are inaccurate. For example, first-time visitors rose by about 3,300 from 2004 to 2006, not 7,000, and returning visitors increased by about 3,200 from 2004 to 2006, rather than 4,000. The final fall was about 1,800, so that estimate is broadly reasonable. Select the main turning points and report them accurately to make the summary more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an introduction and overview to descriptions of each visitor group. Time phrases such as “In the beginning,” “after that,” and “later” help the reader follow the chronology. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the overview is only one brief statement, and the body combines several stages in long sentences, making comparisons difficult to track. The phrase “Looking at the figure, the number of two type of visitors” does not clearly introduce the information that follows. Paragraphing is present, but the ideas within the body would be easier to follow if each group’s changes were reported in a separate, clearly structured paragraph, with more precise links between periods.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “rose,” “drop,” “climb,” “growth,” and “fall,” so the general meaning is usually understandable. There is also an attempt to vary expressions rather than repeat one verb throughout. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “first time visitors rate,” “returing watchers population,” and “climbed significantically.” Spelling errors, including “returing,” “unpredicabely,” and “significantically,” also reduce clarity. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “number of visitors,” “increased,” “declined,” and “reached a peak.” Check spelling and collocations carefully so that the trend descriptions sound precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using time clauses and linking expressions, for example, “after that it start climb” and “later this the returing watchers fall.” This shows an effort to describe changes across multiple periods, but the structures are often faulty, and simple sentence patterns dominate. Errors include subject–verb agreement and verb forms (“it start climb”), missing or incorrect articles and plurals (“the number of two type”), and sentence-boundary and punctuation problems. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in “The” after a comma. These errors sometimes make the relationships between events harder to understand. Build shorter, accurate sentences first, then practise combining them with correctly formed clauses.

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