Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph below describes the amount of first time visitors of caryl island and returning visitors from 2000 to 2008.

Very first,there are few incline and decline in this line graph while the returning visitors graph is dominating.

Moreover,the amount of first time visitors to caryl island started going decline but then it started to incline slowly.It went down from 8000 but a sudden incline is shown from 4000 and it touched 12000 first time visitors.

Finally,the returning visitors line went incline from 2000 then there is a little curve on 10000 and after that the returning visitors line graph completely dominated the graph after that it stopped in the middle of 16000 and 14000 and then went completely decline both lines are quiet opposite the first time visitors line went decline in the start but the returning visitors line declined at the end.first time visitors line is still going incline

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify both visitor groups and describe the broad contrast: first-time visitors fall initially and then rise, while returning visitors rise to a peak before declining. Some figures are also recognisable, including the first-time series starting at 8,000 and falling to 4,000, and returning visitors reaching around 10,000. However, the account is only partly accurate and developed. The first-time series ends at about 11,800, not 12,000, and the returning series peaks at about 15,200 before falling to 13,400; saying it “stopped in the middle of 16000 and 14000” is imprecise. There is no clear overview of the main endpoints or comparison across the period. Select key values and summarise the overall pattern more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to comments on first-time visitors and then returning visitors. This gives the reader some sense of the graph’s progression. However, the organisation is weakened by the lack of clear paragraphing and by ideas being joined into one long final sentence. Connectors such as “Moreover” and “Finally” signal stages, but the relationships between details are not always clear, and “after that” is repeated. The comparison that the lines are “quite opposite” is introduced without being clearly explained. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the two series, and link comparisons directly to the relevant figures to create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant graph vocabulary, including “visitors,” “line graph,” “decline,” and “incline,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the graph is dominating,” “a little curve on 10000,” and “stopped in the middle of 16000 and 14000.” Repeated use of “line” and “visitors” also makes the description less precise. Choose standard trend language and collocations, for example, “rose,” “fell,” “peaked at,” and “ended at.” Check spelling and capitalisation too: “Caryl Island” should be consistently capitalised, and “quiet” should be “quite.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to describe changes over time using past-tense verbs, and some basic clauses communicate the general trends. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to combine several ideas often produce faulty or difficult-to-follow sentences. For example, the final sentence joins multiple trends with no effective punctuation, while “the amount of first time visitors … started going decline” has problems with the grammatical pattern and verb form. There are also missing spaces after commas and inconsistent sentence boundaries. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine them using accurate clauses such as “After falling to 4,000, the figure rose to…”

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