Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of people who visited Caryl Island and compares the data of visitors who came to island for the first time and the ones who returned to island in between 2000 and 2008.

Overall , it can be clearly seen that the number of individuals who visited the Caryl Island were increased dramatically over these years. Interestingly, First time visitors were more in 2000 as compared to returning visitors but in 2008 people who returned were relatively more than first time visitors.

In 2000, there were around 3000 people who were returned to the island and then the amount began to increased significantly to 10000 by 2002 and it kept raised to approximately under 16000 until 2006 and then decreased just below to 14000 in 2008. However, 8000 first time visitors were in 2000 which reduced to half of its numbers means only 4000 visitors were in island until 2002 then they began to raised and reached to just under 12000 in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both visitor groups and identify several key movements: returning visitors rose from about 3,000 to a peak of roughly 15,200 in 2006 before falling, while first-time visitors dipped in 2002 and then increased. However, the overview contains a significant comparison error: first-time visitors were not more numerous in 2000; returning visitors were higher in 2008 as well. The claim that the number of visitors “increased dramatically over these years” is also too broad, since the returning series ends below its 2006 peak and the two groups follow different patterns. Include the first-time series’ 2004 and 2006 figures or milestones to make its development more complete, and state the contrasting trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing the figures. The contrast signalled by “However” helps distinguish the two visitor groups, and the information is generally presented in chronological order. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear, though. The overview’s “these years” is vague, and “it kept raised” does not clearly express the continuing rise. The final paragraph also combines both series in a long sentence, making the sequence of changes harder to follow. Use separate, balanced sentences for each series and clearer links such as “By contrast” or “After reaching a peak in 2006” to improve progression and referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “illustrates,” “compares,” “reduced,” “significantly,” and “approximately.” These choices make the main trends understandable, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, limiting precision. For example, “the amount” is less suitable for people than “the number,” and “people who were returned” does not naturally describe visitors who came back. “Kept raised” and “began to raised” also show difficulty selecting the correct form and collocation. Aim for concise, conventional chart language such as “the figure rose,” “visitor numbers fell,” and “returning visitors.” This will make the description more natural without requiring unnecessarily advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrast with “but” and a time clause beginning “then.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction reduce accuracy. Examples include “were increased” instead of “increased,” “began to increased” instead of “began to increase,” and “they began to raised” instead of “they began to rise.” The opening overview also has agreement problems in “the number … were increased.” Review subject–verb agreement and the verb pattern “begin to + base verb.” More controlled sentence boundaries and punctuation would also help, particularly in the long final sentence.

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