Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates the rate of visitors that visit the caryl island from two thousand to two thousand eight the people that were visit the first time and other that again visit the island the first time visitors was reach at very large numbers.

Firstly,Idisscus the number of new visitors that visit the caryl island again visit it touch to the peak and the number of visitpr was started at two thousand and increse in numbers r

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the topic and time period, and it attempts to distinguish first-time from returning visitors. However, it does not provide a usable summary of the graph: the claim that first-time visitors “reach at very large numbers” is vague, and the description of returning visitors is incomplete and difficult to interpret. It omits the main comparisons, including that returning visitors rose to a peak in 2006 before falling, while first-time visitors declined initially and then increased. The response also contains only 78 words, below the required 150, leaving the task substantially unfinished. To improve, give a clear overview and report the key trends with selected figures from the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by “Firstly,” and a discussion of visitor groups. However, the ideas do not develop into a clear sequence, and the second sentence becomes difficult to follow as it shifts between new and returning visitors. The unfinished ending, “increse in numbers r,” further interrupts progression. The reader cannot readily tell which trend is being described or how the two series compare. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main details, and connect each point clearly—for example, describe first-time visitors’ decline and recovery before contrasting this with returning visitors’ rise and later fall.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “visitors,” “peak,” “numbers,” and “illustrates,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several choices or forms make the meaning unclear, such as “the rate of visitors,” “the people that were visit,” and “touch to the peak.” Spelling errors such as “Idisscus,” “visitpr,” and “increse” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise language used in graph descriptions, including “number of visitors,” “reached a peak,” “rose,” “fell,” and “increased.” Repeating the graph’s categories accurately will also help distinguish first-time visitors from returning visitors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts connected sentences and uses a time reference, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “the first time visitors was reach” has problems with subject–verb agreement and verb form, while “the people that were visit” does not form a correct clause. The long sentence beginning “Firstly” lacks clear sentence boundaries and ends with an incomplete phrase, making the relationships between ideas hard to follow. Most of the writing relies on simple structures, with little accurate variety. Practise forming clear past-tense sentences such as “The number of first-time visitors fell to 4,000 in 2002” and check agreement, articles, and punctuation before finishing.

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