Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph lines illustarate the first time visiter of caryl lsland and returning visitors from 2000 to 2008.

The lowest ratio of first time visitors in 2002 which was 4000 and lowest returing visitors in 2000 which was 3000.And highest first time visitor in 2008 which was 12000 and highest returning visitor in 2006 which was 15000.

The fisrt visitor just drop one time in intial and then go higher and higher till 2008 but the returing visitor go higher and higher at last in 2006 in drop down.

The first time visitor was 8000 in 2000 then it drop to 4000 in 2002 then it rise to 6000 in 2004 and reach near about 10000 in 2006.

The returing visitor was 3000 in 2000 and rise in 2002 to 10000 and 12000 in 2004 in 2006 it drop from 15000 to 13000 in 2008

in between 2000 to 2002 the lines intersect of first time visitor and returning visitor of caryl island at which amount was 6000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important features, including the first-time visitors’ fall to 4,000 in 2002 and the returning visitors’ peak in 2006, and you give figures for both series. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: first-time visitors peak at about 11,800 in 2008, rather than 12,000 exactly, and returning visitors rise to about 15,200 in 2006 before falling to 13,400, not 13,000. The claim that the lines intersect at 6,000 is incorrect; they cross between 2000 and 2002 at roughly 6,000, but the graph does not show an exact intersection value. The response also lacks a clear overview of the contrasting overall patterns. Select the main trends and report them accurately, rather than relying mainly on a list of figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly sensible order: it introduces the graph, identifies highs and lows, and then describes each visitor group. This gives the reader some organisation. However, the ideas are not clearly separated into an overview and supporting details, and several points are repeated—for example, the 2002 low and the 2006 returning-visitor peak appear more than once. Linking is also limited, with repeated use of “then” and “and,” while the final sentence about the intersection is added without a clear connection to the preceding account. Use distinct paragraphs for an overview and the detailed comparisons, and connect changes with precise transitions such as “whereas,” “by contrast,” and “after peaking.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “drop,” “rise,” “highest,” and “lowest,” so the main trends are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or repetitive: “ratio” is not suitable for these visitor numbers, and “go higher and higher” is informal and vague. Spelling errors such as “visiter,” “returing,” and “illustarate” are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the writing. Aim for more precise chart language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe figures as visitor numbers, say that a series “declined” or “increased,” and use “reached a peak” for the highest point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can usually follow the intended comparisons. However, grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to interpret. For example, “The first visitor just drop one time in intial” has an incorrect verb form and an incomplete expression, while “in 2006 it drop from 15000 to 13000 in 2008” does not clearly express the timing of the rise and fall. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in the long sequence beginning “The returing visitor was 3000.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting (“fell,” “rose,” “reached”) and divide longer descriptions into complete sentences with clear subjects and time references.

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