Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the line graph illustrate number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl island from 2000 to 2008.

Overall, the lowest number of visitors who visted thy Caryl island From 2000 to 2008 while the highest number of visitor returning from 2000 to 2008.

The blue line illustrate first time visitors and red line shows the number of retuning visitors.

first time visitors value starting from 8000 then slightly down from 8000 to 4000 and increase number of visitor from 4000 to 10000.

other side returning visitors 3000 to increase 13000.

the difference between first time and returning visitors 3000 number of returning visitor hightest to first time visitors. According to this graph we know that returning visitors hightest to first time visitor.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both visitor groups and make a basic comparison, but the main trends are not reported accurately or fully. First-time visitors fell from 8,000 to 4,000, then rose to about 11,800 by 2008; your account instead says they increased to 10,000 and omits the final figure. Returning visitors rose from 3,000 to a peak of about 15,200 in 2006, then declined to 13,400, whereas you describe a rise to 13,000 without noting the fall. The overview is unclear and the claim that returning visitors were highest throughout is inaccurate, since first-time visitors led in 2000. The response is also below the required 150 words; 16 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Add a clear overview and select accurate key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening, an overview, and separate comments on the two lines. This gives the reader some sense of the topic. However, progression is weak because the figures are presented in short, disconnected statements, and the final comparison repeats the claim that returning visitors were highest without clarifying when. Linking phrases such as “other side” and “According to this graph” do not create clear relationships between the data. Use a more purposeful sequence: introduce the graph, summarise the overall pattern, then compare the two series across the period. Clear paragraphing and accurate connectors such as “while,” “by contrast,” and “after peaking” would make the account easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, but it includes relevant terms such as “first time visitors,” “returning visitors,” “increase,” and “difference,” so the topic remains identifiable. Repeated use of “visitor” and “number” limits precision, and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, including “visted,” “retuning,” and “hightest.” Phrases such as “increase number of visitor” and “returning visitors 3000 to increase 13000” are difficult to interpret because the wording does not express the trend naturally. Build a small range of accurate graph language, including “rose,” “fell,” “reached a peak,” and “stood at,” and use “figure” or “total” to avoid repetition. Check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, with little variety in sentence structure. Frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning unclear. For example, “the line graph illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “first time visitors value starting from 8000” lacks a correctly formed verb and article. The sentence beginning “the difference between first time and returning visitors 3000” is also incomplete, so the comparison is hard to understand. There is an attempt to use a contrast structure in “other side,” but it is not formed as a complete sentence. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense verbs consistently to describe the historical data.

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