Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In 2000 the re turning visitors only range at [redacted phone] but the first time visitors range at 8000 because the where the first time but in 2002 the first time visitor dropped at 8000 but the returning visitor is higher in 2002 the island made 10000 visitors, in 2004 the first time visitor dropped at 4000 but the returning visitor made higher evey hear this 2004 the island made 12000 visitors beacuse that island is beautiful to visit but the first time visitor made 6000 its get higher that 2002. Every year has different visits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the two visitor groups and includes some relevant figures, such as 10,000 returning visitors in 2002 and 12,000 in 2004. However, several trends are misreported: first-time visitors fell to 4,000 in 2002, not 8,000, and rose to 6,000 in 2004 rather than dropping to that figure. The response also omits the later years, including the peak in returning visitors in 2006 and the overall rise in first-time visitors after 2002. There is no clear overview of the main patterns, and the claim that the island is beautiful is unsupported by the graph. The response is 95 words, below the required 150, so it needs fuller, accurate coverage of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Some chronological order is present: the response moves from 2000 through 2002 and 2004, and it attempts to compare the two visitor groups. However, the information is presented as one long, difficult-to-follow sequence, with no paragraphing or clear overview to guide the reader. Connections such as “but” and “because” do not consistently show the relationship between the figures, and “Every year has different visits” adds little to the comparison. Organise the report into a brief overview followed by clearly grouped details, and use separate sentences for each year or trend. This would make the progression easier to follow and reduce the need for repeated linking words.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses basic task-related vocabulary, including “first time visitors,” “returning visitor,” “dropped,” and “higher,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, the range is narrow and repetitive, and several choices are inaccurate or awkward: “range at” does not clearly describe a figure, while “made 10000 visitors” is not a natural way to report visitor numbers. Spelling errors such as “evey” and “beacuse,” along with the split form “re turning,” also weaken clarity. Use precise reporting language such as “stood at,” “rose to,” “fell to,” and “reached a peak,” and check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but sentence structures are limited and frequent errors make some relationships difficult to understand. For example, “the first time visitors range at 8000 because the where the first time” has an incomplete and unclear clause, while “in 2004 the first time visitor dropped at 4000” uses an incorrect verb pattern. There are also problems with articles, number agreement and punctuation, as in “the island made 10000 visitors” and the run-on sequence linking several years. Build accurate simple sentences first—for example, “First-time visitors fell to 4,000 in 2002”—then add comparisons using controlled clauses and full stops.

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