Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph illustrates the number of first time visitors and returning visistors who visited Caryl island from 2000 to 2008.
Overall, the amount of retuened tourists were increased by the passing year, whereas the first time visitors number was onces dropped in the year 2002.
On the one hand, the first time traveler number was highest in the year 2000 that was total 8000, while there was sudden decline in the number of people in the year 2002 that was by 4000. However, the travelers individuals again spike in the year 2004 and accounted as 6000, this number was incresed and this time doubles the travelers was about 10000, finally this number accounted 12000 in the year 2008.
On the other side, the number of returened visitors are less in year 2000 that was between 2000 to 4000. While in the year 2002 noticable incresed in the sum was obsereved that was total 10000 visitors, this number doubles and in the year 2004 Caryl island attracted 12000 visitors. In addition in the year 2006 number rose and reached to 15000. But there was sudden drop in the number that was loss of 2000 and number reaches to above 13000 but less than 14000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You cover both visitor groups and identify the main contrast: returning visitors generally rose before falling, while first-time visitors dipped in 2002 and then recovered. Several figures are close to the chart, including 8,000 first-time visitors in 2000, 10,000 returning visitors in 2002 and about 15,000 in 2006. However, the overview is not fully accurate: returning visitors did not increase throughout, since they fell from roughly 15,200 in 2006 to 13,400 in 2008. The first-time series also ends at about 11,800, rather than 12,000, and its 2008 figure is not described as a comparison with the other group. Make the overview more precise and distinguish the two series clearly when reporting changes.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for the two visitor categories. This makes the main information reasonably easy to follow. You also use time markers such as “in the year 2002” and transitions including “However” and “In addition.” At times, though, the linking feels mechanical or the reference is unclear. For example, “this number doubles” does not clearly identify which figure is being compared, and “On the one hand” / “On the other side” are less natural for organising two data series. Group the figures into clear trends and use concise references such as “this figure” only when the antecedent is unmistakable.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the general trends, including “decline,” “rose,” “reached” and “drop.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems make the report less precise. “Travelers individuals” and “the number of people” are awkward or vague in this context, while “loss of 2000” is not a natural way to describe a decrease in visitor numbers. There are also repeated misspellings, including “visistors,” “retuened” and “incresed.” Use accurate terms consistently, such as “visitors,” “figure” and “number,” and check spelling before submitting. More precise trend language would help you describe the data clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can generally understand the sequence of changes. Some grammatical errors, however, affect accuracy and occasionally make relationships unclear. For example, “the amount of retuened tourists were increased” has a subject–verb agreement problem and an incorrect verb construction; “the first time visitors number was onces dropped” also has an awkward structure. Articles and sentence boundaries need attention in phrases such as “in year 2000” and “While in the year 2002 noticeable increase … was observed.” Practise forming accurate comparisons and trend sentences, for example, “The number of returning visitors increased to 10,000 in 2002.” This will improve control while retaining sentence variety.
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