Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of first visitirs and returning visitirs who visited cary island from 2000 to 2008.

Overall,first time visitors gradually peak when returning visitors increased highly 2008.

In 2002 first time visitors gardually increased 2002 when peak highly in 2008.after

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the graph’s subject and attempts an overview, but it does not adequately summarise the main features. The overview, “first time visitors gradually peak when returning visitors increased highly 2008,” is unclear and does not accurately capture the key pattern: returning visitors rose to a high point in 2006 before falling, while first-time visitors recovered after 2002 and continued rising. The detail about first-time visitors is also inaccurate: they fell from about 8,000 in 2000 to 4,000 in 2002, rather than increasing in 2002. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving most figures and comparisons unreported. To improve, give a clear overview and select several accurate figures to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and then an overview, but the progression is difficult to follow. The final paragraph starts “In 2002” and ends with the incomplete “after,” so the reader cannot understand how the point is meant to continue. The overview also combines the two series in a confusing way, making their trends hard to distinguish. The use of paragraph breaks is a useful starting point, but the response needs a complete body paragraph that reports the data in a logical order, such as describing each visitor group across the years. Use clear links between sentences and avoid leaving ideas unfinished.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “first time visitors,” “returning visitors,” and “line graph,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the meaning unclear. “Increased highly” is not a natural way to describe a sharp rise, while “gradually peak” does not clearly express the trend. There are also spelling errors in “visitirs” and “cary,” and “gardually.” Use accurate trend vocabulary and check spelling and word forms carefully. For example, describe figures as rising, falling, reaching a peak, or recovering, and use “visitors” consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements and an overview, but grammatical control is uneven and the final sentence is incomplete. In “Overall,first time visitors gradually peak when returning visitors increased highly 2008,” the relationship between the clauses is unclear, and the verb forms do not consistently describe the past period. “In 2002 first time visitors gardually increased 2002 when peak highly in 2008.after” lacks a complete grammatical structure and ends with a fragment. Punctuation is also inconsistent, including missing spaces after commas and a full stop before “after.” Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, use past-tense forms for the historical data, and proofread sentence boundaries.

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