Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates the Caryl Island actual number of new and repeated visitors from 2000 to 2008.

First time visitors dramatically fall from 2000 and after 2002 it shows a gradual increase in the trend. Moreover, Repeating visitors rapidly escalates from 2000. Crosses new visitors and shows almost double of it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the two visitor groups and notes the broad fall and subsequent rise in first-time visitors, so it is relevant to the graph. However, it gives only a very limited account of the data: it omits nearly all figures, does not describe the returning visitors’ continued rise to a peak in 2006 followed by a decline, and does not provide a clear overview of the main changes across the period. The claim that returning visitors “shows almost double” the number of new visitors is imprecise and does not specify when this comparison applies. The response is also 98 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to select and report the key features. Include an overview and support it with accurate comparisons and selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas follow a basic time-based order: the response first describes first-time visitors and then returning visitors. The opening sentence also establishes the subject, and “Moreover” signals an addition. However, the response is too brief to develop a clear progression or organise the information into a useful overview and supporting details. The link “Crosses new visitors” is unclear, so the relationship between the two series is difficult to follow; “it” in “almost double of it” also has an uncertain reference. Use separate, logically connected sentences to describe each series, then make a direct comparison at a specific year. Clear paragraphing and more precise referencing would make the account easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses relevant basic terms such as “first time visitors,” “repeated visitors,” “fall,” and “increase,” which make the general subject understandable. It also attempts more descriptive language with “dramatically” and “rapidly.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise: “Caryl Island actual number” is awkward, “Repeating visitors” is not the usual label, and “escalates” is not a natural choice for visitor numbers in this context. “Crosses new visitors” does not clearly express the comparison intended. Aim for accurate chart vocabulary and natural collocations, such as “the number of returning visitors rose” and “overtook first-time visitors.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates its basic meaning through short sentences and uses present-tense verbs to describe the graph. There is an attempt to combine ideas with “Moreover,” but the grammatical range remains narrow, with little sentence variety or complex structure. Several errors affect clarity: “the Caryl Island actual number” has an awkward noun phrase, “First time visitors dramatically fall” lacks a natural grammatical construction, and “Repeating visitors … shows” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The fragment “Crosses new visitors” also lacks a clear subject and complete sentence structure. Practise forming complete sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, for example, “The number of first-time visitors fell … before rising again.”

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