Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is a popular debate among people regarding the animals that are kept in zoos. Some people believe animals should be free and zoos should be closed; however, I firmly believe zoo should not be closed due to it providing great educational purpose in students and it indirectly provides wild animal with safe environment.

One significant drawback of keeping animals in zoo is that there have no freedom and kept away from their natural habitat which makes them dependent on human for survival. Animals at zoo are provided sufficant food and shelter so that their hunting or survival skills becomes dull over time. For instance: during a survey in UK when animals of zoo are sent in wild they arenot able to adust in wild life and died in almost a month.

On other hand, keeping zoos available could provide educational knowledge to children on aggresive animals which might be difficult in wild. Animals behave aggressive in wild and researchers find it diffult to collect data on animals for study purpose so zoo provide scientist with safer environment.

Another benefit of zoos is that injured and endangered animals could be kept there under the watch of professionals to treat their injury or increase their population in safer environment. In zoo caretaker and vet doctor regulate their health and provide them with food and shelter. For example: In nepal one horned rhino which was close to extinction was brought back to wild due to efforts of such zoos with the help of scientists.

In conclusion, from one view zoos make animals dull and take their surviving skill but on the other hand it also provide safe educational purpose area for student and help injured animals to treat their wound. That's why I disagree with closing of zoos however, I recommend proper survelence should be done in zoo by high officials to regulat zoo properly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you disagree with closing zoos, and the conclusion restates this view while recommending stronger oversight. You address the central issue and support your position with relevant points about education, research, and the care of injured or endangered animals. The Nepalese rhino example helps make the conservation argument concrete. However, the discussion is not fully consistent: the first body paragraph focuses on the harm zoos can cause, but does not clearly explain how this affects your overall case. The educational point is also asserted rather than illustrated with a specific example. Develop each reason more evenly and explain how the evidence supports your position to make the argument more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The ideas generally progress from a drawback of zoos to their educational and conservation benefits, and signposts such as “On other hand” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. This provides a coherent overall arrangement. However, some links are mechanical or unclear: the first body paragraph presents a drawback without explicitly connecting it to your position, and “Another benefit” does not fully clarify how the new point relates to the previous one. The conclusion also compresses several ideas into one sentence. Use clearer references and transitions that show the relationship between claims, and make each paragraph’s main point and supporting explanation more distinct.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “natural habitat,” “survival skills,” “endangered animals,” and “extinction,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more specific terms such as “researchers” and “professionals.” However, the range and control are limited by repeated general words such as “safe,” “provide,” and “animals,” as well as inaccurate or awkward collocations: “educational purpose,” “aggressive animals,” and “regulate their health.” Spelling errors such as “sufficant,” “adust,” “diffult,” and “survelence” are noticeable and can slow the reader. Build a more precise vocabulary for conservation and education, check spelling carefully, and learn common word partnerships rather than translating phrases directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “however” and a relative clause in “animals which might be difficult in wild.” This shows some range, and your main ideas are usually understandable. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur across the response. For example, “there have no freedom” lacks a suitable verb construction, “their hunting or survival skills becomes” has subject–verb disagreement, and “it also provide” does not agree with its subject. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “in zoo” and “scientist.” Some sentence boundaries and punctuation, particularly around “For instance,” make the writing less controlled. Practise accurate clause construction, agreement, and article use before adding further complexity.

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