Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Today our topic is about the animals kept in zoo . I stronglt disagree with the idea of closing zoo as they said we no longer need animals kept in zoo . First of all , I just want to ask a question with which aspact or prove they said that we no longer need to kept animals in zoo . Here are the complete avidances of why ,I disagree with this :

First of all , I want to make some addition in your knowledge that numberous of the animals are disappared form the world because they only didn't get their sutiable enviroment which they demand to stay alive . As a human a clean envirnoment is our first need to stay alive . Therefore zoo is neccesary to provide them their perfect enviroment which got distrupted due to human activities .

Another strong reason why , I disagree with this . Lots people not have proper knowledge in other word they don't now about the beauty of nature and different aspects . So , they just kill lots of animals for shake of their owner and to show them a greate hunter . In result of that animal chain or animal food chain got damaged as hunter kill them with out no reason and also it lead to the shortage of their species in the envirnoment . Again the zoo fits here it saves those species and gave them a friendly enviroment to live . Zoo is got paid by goverment or by the visitors to do this .

Zoo also provide real and authentic information , experience and different kind of stuff to the visitors as they got a chance to saw rear species in their .

At last , Inconclusion zoo is still very important to save different species of animals , to get real knowledge about rear species and to make enviroment balance . I might thought this enough .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you strongly disagree with closing zoos, and you return to this view in the conclusion. You give relevant reasons, including protecting endangered species, preventing harm caused by hunters, and educating visitors. These points address the question, but they are not all developed equally. For example, the claim that zoos provide animals with a “perfect environment” needs qualification and explanation, since it is not clear how zoo conditions meet animals’ needs. The education point is also brief and would benefit from a specific example. To strengthen the response, explain how each reason supports keeping zoos open and acknowledge or answer a possible concern about animal welfare in captivity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for reasons, and a concluding statement. Sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “Another strong reason,” and “At last” help signal the stages of your argument. However, the progression is sometimes mechanical, and several ideas within paragraphs are joined without clear relationships. For instance, the paragraph about hunting moves from public knowledge to hunters, food chains, species loss, and zoo funding quite quickly. Some references, such as “they” and “this,” are also unclear. Use fewer repeated transition phrases and organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “species,” “food chain,” “authentic information,” and “environment,” and the reader can generally identify your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and many spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make the writing less precise, such as “disappared,” “sutiable,” “for shake of,” and “rear species.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “make some addition in your knowledge” and “Zoo is got paid.” Aim to learn topic vocabulary in accurate phrases, rather than translating expressions directly. Proofreading spelling and checking whether words naturally combine will make your argument clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “because,” “therefore,” and “as.” This gives the response some variety, but control is uneven: errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction sometimes make ideas difficult to follow. For example, “they only didn't get their suitable environment” and “Zoo also provide” show problems with verb form and subject–verb agreement, while “I might thought this enough” is not grammatically formed. Several sentences also contain multiple clauses without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences first, then extend them with one clear subordinate clause; check subjects, verb forms, and articles during proofreading.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.