Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

in the last years we see many people who defende about the animal right who did said that we no longer need zoo and we should close all the zoo we have.

and thats there opinion and what the defend about because they beleve that animal should not be in cage and they describe thise zoo like a jail and said that we did take those animal freedom just for our pleasure and that those animal didn't do anything wrong to get the rest of her life in jail

and that many psychologist who did study animals and there feeling and do reasurch about it did have a conclusion that thise animals feel said and unhappy

and those who defend about anymals wright said that avery one deser to live in the nature that did cruted on it and make hime feel huppy and comfortable but unfortunately most animal in the zoo are not and they sufrring

also that many anymals unfortunately diddei in the zoo even tha because of the environment it not suitable or the food is bot ggod or because of the bad treatment and the negligent

while in the othere side many other people see that ist ok to get zoo because it's have many benefits for bouth humans and animals

because there r many animals r in the danger of vanish and still a fue number and if the in the forest the will get lost for ever so to be in protected olace is good for them

also in the last few years most zoo have a spesialist in the animals to work with them and doctors to see there condion

in the others side huen also benifet so the bring there children to see animals and make them close to it and that visiting bring money to the zoo so that make them treat the animals so well and feed them

so in the end i believe that those hwo defend about animls right have a good point but still the animals will be more protercted with the humen hand and bring more benefets for them and for us

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a relevant position: although you acknowledge animal-rights concerns, you conclude that zoos should remain because they can protect endangered species and educate children. This addresses the question and gives reasons on both sides. However, the position is not consistently clear until the conclusion, and much of the response reports what different groups believe rather than developing your own argument. For example, the claim that animals are safer in zoos is relevant, but it needs a specific explanation or example; the point about visitor income leading to better treatment is also asserted rather than demonstrated. Develop fewer reasons in more depth, and make your agreement or disagreement explicit in the introduction and throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is an identifiable overall structure: you introduce the debate, discuss arguments against zoos, present benefits, and finish with your view. This gives the reader a basic route through the response. However, the ideas are mostly presented as one continuous sequence rather than clearly separated paragraphs, and progression is weakened by repeated links such as “and,” “also,” and “in the other side.” Some connections are difficult to follow, particularly the shift from animal welfare concerns to the benefits for humans. Use distinct paragraphs for the opposing view, your supporting reasons, and the conclusion. Choose linking phrases that show the precise relationship between ideas, and use clear references so readers can tell which animals or people “they” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “animal right,” “in danger,” “protected,” “environment,” and “treatment,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “animals,” “zoo,” and “benefits.” Frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices—such as “defende,” “vanish,” and “negligent”—sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. Some expressions are also unnatural, for example “defend about animal rights” and “close to it” when discussing children’s contact with animals. Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations carefully; this will make your arguments clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining that animals may be unhappy in captivity and when describing the benefits of zoos. However, sentence structures are limited and these longer attempts often contain several grammatical problems. In “many people who defende … who did said,” the relative clause and verb forms are not controlled; “most animal in the zoo are not” also has problems with number and sentence completion. Articles, subject–verb agreement, tense, and punctuation are frequently inaccurate, and many sentences run together without clear boundaries. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them using accurate clauses. Check verb forms and singular/plural agreement, and use full stops to separate each main idea.

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