Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

That is irrefutable that now some of animal are only visible and possible to see at zoos. Certain people think that, at present we no longer need to kept animal in zoos, so zoos should be closed.I totally disagree with this notion, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.

First and foresmost, some animals does not have basic facilties to survive in wild, because of that they are leading towards to extinct. But because of zoos they can survive easily.Zoos can help them to provide basic facilties such as animals can recieve suffiecient food, treatment for diseases, because of these reasons zoos are far better to kept animal cause, they can able to live longer and much better life compared to forests.

Secondly, many animals are now not visible in wildlife.Therefore, humans who want to see them they have only one option to see that animals in zoos and if zoos will closed then they can not seen them which is big loss for humans.This is because many animals have beuatiful apperence, voice and gestures which is not visible if we saw them in wildlife but due to zoos this is possible.In additon, zoos can also play key role to increase income of our government because when people buy tickets then zoos authorities collects some tax for the government which is beneficial for nation.

To sum up, zoos are essential for survival of animal where they can recieve ameties to live their normal lives and also for human it is only option to see different animal at one place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I totally disagree,” and the conclusion maintains that zoos support animal survival and allow people to see wildlife. You give relevant reasons, including care for animals that struggle to survive in the wild and the educational or viewing value of zoos. However, these points are not equally developed. The claim that some animals cannot survive in the wild needs a specific example or explanation of how zoos contribute to conservation, such as breeding or rehabilitation. The point about animals’ appearance and gestures is less persuasive as a reason to keep zoos open, and the government-income argument is introduced briefly without showing why it outweighs concerns about animal welfare. Develop and support each main reason more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present reasons, and a conclusion restates your position. Sequencing phrases such as “First and foremost,” “Secondly,” and “To sum up” make the progression easy to follow. This is a strength, and the paragraphs generally have identifiable purposes. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “because of that” and “because of these reasons” repeat the same causal link, while the long sequence beginning “This is because many animals…” moves from viewing wildlife to appearance and then government income without a clear transition. Use more precise referencing and divide or connect related points so the reader can follow how each example supports your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “survive,” “extinct,” “treatment for diseases,” and “income,” so the main ideas can be understood. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make the writing less natural. Examples include “foresmost,” “facilties,” “suffiecient,” “apperence,” and “ameties.” Phrases such as “leading towards to extinct” and “basic facilities to survive in wild” also show imprecise word choice or phrasing. Aim to learn vocabulary in natural combinations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “endangered species,” “conservation programmes,” and “public awareness” would help you explain your reasons with greater clarity and variety.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because” and “which,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur often enough to make some sentences difficult to read. For example, “some of animal are” needs a plural form and an article, while “we no longer need to kept animal” uses the wrong verb form after “need to.” In “some animals does not have,” the subject and verb do not agree; “they can not seen them” is also missing a passive verb form. Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build complex sentences and check each clause for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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