Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this modern century, keeping animals in zoos has become a pressing issue to debate for people. It is argued by some people that there is no need to preserve animals in zoos and thus, closed all the zoos. I don't agree with this arguement as zoos help to protect wildlife, and provide opportunities to urban people to explore various types of animals and species that they haven't seen before.

Generally, animals lose freedom when people caught and put them into zoos, and ultimately they can't contribute to maintain ecological balance in environment. They have to act according to the trainer, and lose their natural ways of living their life. For instance, when an animal kept by a zoo authority, they train them to use it for their purpose. In that case, it loses its' natural strengths which effects it's freedom.

However, aminals which kept in zoos get enough care and security to keep their body fit, which increased their reproduction rate at a considerable rate. As a result, more wild animals can born and enrich the natural biodiversity. Moreover, zoos can protect wildlife by preserving animals in this rapidly changing climate condition in the earth. For example, due to changing weather conditions, animals are currently in the threat of potential death. In this case, preserving them in zoos will protect them from destruction. On top of that, zoos give chances to urban people to see the variety of animals which they haven't experienced yet. For instance, the students from urban area can get to know about biodiversity and different kinds of creatures from zoos beyond their academic learning. Therefore, closing zoos will limit these benefits for the better civilized socities.

In conclusion, though keeping zoos restrict freedom for animals, zoos can serve as a learning institutions for urban learners, and ultimately save the wildlife by keeping them under the right observation and care.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you disagree with closing zoos, while acknowledging that captivity restricts animals’ freedom. You give relevant reasons—wildlife protection, reproduction and public education—and support them with examples such as students learning about biodiversity. This addresses the task, and the argument is generally easy to follow. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: for example, the claim that zoo care increases reproduction and enriches biodiversity needs clarification about how this benefits threatened species in the wild. The discussion of animals losing their natural behaviour is also brief and is not weighed against your main arguments. Develop these ideas with more precise explanation and evidence, and make the comparison between the harms and benefits more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, the body paragraphs present a concern and then your supporting reasons, and the conclusion restates your position. Linking expressions such as “However,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. The progression is coherent, though some connections are mechanical or unclear. In the first body paragraph, the example about trainers does not clearly show how captivity prevents animals from contributing to ecological balance. In the next paragraph, several benefits are grouped together, so the shift from reproduction to climate protection and then education feels abrupt. Use clearer topic sentences and explain the relationship between each example and its claim; vary transitions and use pronouns with precise references.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “wildlife,” “ecological balance,” “biodiversity,” “reproduction rate,” and “climate condition.” These choices show an effort to discuss the issue beyond basic terms, and the intended meaning is usually clear. Some less natural collocations and word choices reduce precision, however: “pressing issue to debate,” “urban people,” “under the right observation,” and “better civilized societies” do not express your ideas idiomatically. There are also spelling errors, including “arguement,” “aminals,” and “socities.” Aim to learn vocabulary in natural phrases and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for conservation and animal welfare would help you express the argument with greater flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “when,” “which,” and “though,” and most of your meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “when people caught and put them” needs a passive form, while “more wild animals can born” needs “can be born.” In “animals which kept in zoos,” the relative clause also requires a passive verb. Other examples include “zoos … closed” and “a learning institutions,” where the verb form and article-number agreement are inaccurate. Review passive constructions, modal verbs, and singular/plural agreement, then proofread each sentence. Greater accuracy across these structures would make your argument smoother and more controlled.

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