Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is unnecessary to keep the wild animals in zoos, as a result wildlife parks need to be closed.To some extent I disagree with the statment but, I also support for the reason that zoos play a vital role in preservation of some rare species of animals and birds yet, it greatly effects the eco system by taking these animals away from their natural habitats.

The animal parks are one of the manmade place which can play a variety of functions including intertainment areas for minors as well as adults. Additionally it offer a best preservation centers for some rarely alive species, provide them the diet full of every kind of nutrients necessary for their wellbeing. Further, prividing them a safe environment free from the fear of predators and also offer a vide range of jobs opportunities in different fields. For instance jobs for security, veternity, nutrionist and security.

In contrast, it might also be concerning that keeping all these animals away from their natural environment effect their habitat and our eco system. Additionally they are also unable to displace from one place to another freely as the do in the wild they have a limited space which can prevent them. Their natural comfort is also distube. For instance the visitior can disturb their comfort zone.

In conclusion, the animal parks are also necessary for their preservation while it can also contribute to the destruction of their natural habitates and nature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the question and present a partly balanced position: zoos can preserve rare species, but removing animals from their habitats can harm their welfare and the ecosystem. These are relevant reasons, and the examples of veterinary and security jobs add some support. However, your stance is not fully clear: “To some extent I disagree” is followed by support for both sides, without explaining whether you ultimately think zoos should close. Several points, such as the claim that zoos damage the ecosystem, are asserted rather than explained. The response also falls short of the required minimum length, so there is limited space to develop your reasoning. State your position directly and extend each main point with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. “In contrast” signals a shift to the disadvantages, helping the reader follow the broad direction of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from entertainment to conservation, animal care and employment without showing how these points connect. Some linking words, including “Additionally” and “Further,” are used mechanically, and the conclusion repeats the two sides rather than resolving them. Improve cohesion by grouping related ideas, using clear topic sentences, and making references such as “it” and “these animals” unambiguous. A more decisive final sentence would also give the essay a clearer overall progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “preservation,” “natural habitats,” “predators” and “nutrients,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make the writing less precise. Examples include “rarely alive species,” “best preservation centers,” “intertainment areas” and “vide range.” Some phrases also sound unnatural, such as “jobs opportunities” and “their natural comfort.” These errors do not prevent understanding overall, but they reduce clarity and control. Build a more accurate set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling and word forms carefully; for example, use “endangered species,” “conservation centres” and “a wide range of job opportunities.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “while” and a clause beginning “as the do in the wild.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “the animal parks are one of the manmade place” has problems with agreement and number, while “Additionally it offer” has subject–verb disagreement. In “as the do in the wild,” the pronoun is incorrect, and several sentences lack clear grammatical structure or punctuation, including the opening sentence where two clauses run together. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles and plural forms, and build longer sentences from correctly controlled clauses.

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