Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The statement " We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos " is very deep in its meaning. It seems to be quite simple but in reality it is not as simple as it looks like.I agree with the statement. And now i will justify this statement with my knowledge and evidence.

First and the most important thing is the habitat. No matter what facilty we provide, what environment we create or what else we do we can recreate the natural habitat for animals. The animals which are kept in zoo are provided with many facilities but the natural habitat provided by the Nature cannot be recreated or even copied.

Second thing about this matter is that the number of animals are decreasing for many past years. The main reason behind this is hunting. Zoo authorities capture animals and force them to liv their remaining life in that iron cage. The loss of habitat pf animals and the seperation from thier community has an adverse effect on their health and bodies.

The third evidence i will put in this will be that by keeping the animas in iron cage, no matter how big it is, effects the animal. The reason is that animals are used to live in open area with no limits. They have their own choices. They eat when they want , they roam about when they want . In simple words they have no limits and this is the thing that the zoos are destroying.

Building zoos to generate revenue by making animals to suffer is a thing that cannot be accepted. The zoos are, no doubt, a source of recreation for people but if we think from the point of vuew of animals it is destroyin their ecosystem.

Putting the debate in a nutshell, the zoos should be closed not only to protect animals but also to increase their number and to save their habitat. I end the total detail with a general question: " They trapped you inside a cage. Are you still happy? "

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I agree”) and remains consistent, and you give relevant reasons concerning habitat, captivity, and the effects of confinement. The conclusion also restates your view and links it to protecting animals. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, you say zoo authorities capture animals and that animal numbers are decreasing, but do not distinguish this from conservation breeding or support the claim with a specific example. The point about animals’ freedom is relevant, but could be developed by explaining a concrete effect of restricted movement or social separation. The response addresses the question, though its reasons are not all equally developed; clearer evidence and fuller explanation would strengthen the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, three reason-led paragraphs, a further point about revenue and recreation, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First,” “Second,” and “The third evidence” help readers follow the argument. However, this pattern becomes mechanical, and some links between claims are unclear. For instance, the move from declining animal numbers to zoos capturing animals does not explain how the two are connected. The paragraph beginning “Building zoos to generate revenue” introduces a related but distinct point without clearly linking it to the preceding discussion. Improve progression by grouping related ideas, using transitions that show cause and contrast, and making references such as “this” or “the matter” more specific.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate your main ideas, including “natural habitat,” “hunting,” “ecosystem,” and “recreation.” There are also attempts at more expressive phrasing, such as “putting the debate in a nutshell.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “facilty,” “liv,” “pf,” “seperation,” “thier,” and “destroyin.” Some combinations are unnatural or imprecise: “deep in its meaning,” “the number of animals are decreasing,” and “effects the animal.” Repetition of “animals,” “zoos,” and “thing” also limits range. Build accuracy by checking spelling and choosing more precise collocations, while retaining the relevant topic vocabulary you already use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including conditional and relative clauses, as in “No matter what facility we provide…” and “animals which are kept in zoo.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “the number of animals are decreasing,” the missing article or plural in “kept in zoo,” and the faulty construction “by keeping the animals in iron cage … effects the animal.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: “It seems to be quite simple but in reality it is not as simple as it looks like.I agree” runs together, while spaces before commas are inconsistent. Practise accurate agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, then proofread longer sentences.

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