Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is believed by some individuals that zoos are now irrelevant referring that they are no longer in use and should be closed. I do not agree with the statement.

Undoubtedly, animals should be in the wild as it is their suitable place to live. There are numerous reasons of them living in the wildlife. Firstly, the nature has been the home for the animals since it is their natural habitat from the very earliest existence of earth. Secondly, nature provides all the necessary equipment such as shelter, food, water and everything they require to survive. For example, the animals need their own pace of life unlike humans. They tend to live better when they are free.

However, we need zoos for many reasosns. First of all, zoos play a vital role in our life because they significantly take part in the growth of a nations GDP. Secondly, there are a lot of animals out there zoos who cannot survive in the wild and they get well fed in the zoos. Moreover, there are many harsh sides of nature such as disasters. That side of wild can hinder their way of living. There are also some times where animals struggle to find food. Therefore, if they are kept in zoos they are more likely to be safe and well fed.

In todays scenario, zoos are popular among young kids because they have an immense interest of learning about animals. For that reason, they often visit zoos with their parents to learn about new animals they have never seen before. Not only zoos are famous among the kids but it also famous among the older generation.

In conclusion, the advantages of zoo outweigh its disadvantages so there is no such need of closing them. The government just need to ensure that the animals kept in the zoos are well fed and taken care of.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I do not agree”) and is maintained in the conclusion, where you argue that zoos should remain open. You address relevant reasons, including animal care, protection from dangers in the wild, and children’s learning. However, the discussion is uneven: the point about zoos contributing to a nation’s GDP is asserted but not explained, and the claim that some animals cannot survive in the wild would be stronger with a specific example. The opening paragraph also spends considerable space agreeing that the wild is animals’ suitable home before explaining why zoos are still needed. Develop your strongest reasons with clearer evidence and explain how they answer the claim that zoos are no longer necessary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the natural habitat and the benefits of zoos, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main points. However, some links feel mechanical, and the relationship between ideas is not always clear. For example, the GDP claim appears abruptly between the general value of zoos and the care of animals, without showing how economic contribution supports keeping them open. “That side of wild” also refers vaguely to the dangers mentioned just before it. Use clearer references and connect each supporting point directly to the paragraph’s main argument; this would make the progression more fluent and cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, including “natural habitat,” “survive,” “disasters,” and “well fed,” which makes the main ideas understandable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “play a vital role” and “immense interest.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “reasons of them living in the wildlife,” “necessary equipment,” and “animals out there zoos” do not express the intended meanings naturally. Spelling errors such as “reasosns” and “nations” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural combinations—for example, “reasons why animals live in the wild,” “basic necessities,” and “animals in zoos”—and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “animals … who cannot survive in the wild” and a conditional structure in “if they are kept in zoos.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. Examples include “the nature has been the home” (article use), “zoos are popular … but it also famous” (agreement and missing verb), and “The government just need” (subject–verb agreement). The sentence beginning “Not only zoos are famous” also has an incorrect inversion pattern. Practise accurate agreement, articles, and structures with “not only … but also,” while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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