Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is believed that zoos should be closed because there is no need to keep animals in the zoos. I strongly agree with the statement beacuse zoos require a lot of efforts and money to maintain and animlas must be provided with a natural habitat.

In today's world, some species of animals are declining at a faster rate like white tiger and green parrots. One of the main reasons is the deforestation and lack of natural habitat for their survival and growth. Therefore, when animals are kept in captivating environment there fertility and reproduction are severly affected. Such as, white tigers are endangered species, in an captivating environment there reproduction will definately affected. Moreover, to cope with the environmental challenges a natural environment must be provided to species to run the flow of food web and food chains.

Furthermore, zoos required a large number of labour and budgeting for maintainence. Developing countries have a varity of major challenges of overpopulation, provision of proper resources of food and shelter to cope with, therefore, there maintainence is an additional burden on the economy. For instance, in 2004 a big elephant named NoorJahan was dead in the safari zoo in karachi. The main reason was the poor management, lack of adequate resources (food and water) and medical treatment.

In conclusion, nowadays it is very challenging to keep animals in the zoo due to lack of resources and poor economies especially in developing countries. Additionally, animlas required an adequate environment and habitat to grow, reproduce and survive. I firmly believe that there is no need of these captivating areas and they must be closed for the sustainable environment.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I strongly agree”) and remains consistent in the conclusion. You give two relevant reasons: animals need suitable habitats, and zoos can be costly to manage, particularly in developing countries. The example of NoorJahan also helps illustrate the consequences of poor zoo management. However, some claims are not fully explained: the link between captivity and reduced reproduction is asserted rather than supported, and the discussion of food webs does not clearly show why closing zoos would improve them. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation and use precise, well-supported examples to address the issue more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion that restates your position. Connectors such as “Furthermore,” “For instance,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. Some links between ideas are less clear, however. The sentence beginning “Moreover, to cope with the environmental challenges” shifts from reproduction to food webs without explaining the connection, while “Such as” introduces an incomplete example rather than a smoothly integrated one. Referencing in “there” and “their” is also sometimes unclear. Use transitions to show the precise relationship between claims, and make sure each example directly supports the point in its paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “deforestation,” “natural habitat,” “endangered species,” “environmental challenges,” and “poor management.” These choices help communicate the subject and show attempts to use less common language. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “beacuse,” “animlas,” “severly,” and “varity.” Some collocations are also awkward: “captivating environment” does not mean an environment suitable for animals, and “a large number of labour and budgeting” is not natural phrasing. Choose precise terms and check spelling and collocations carefully; this will make your argument clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including cause-and-effect structures with “because” and “therefore,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, and verb forms. For example, “zoos required” should use a present-tense verb, and “there fertility and reproduction are” needs a possessive form and clearer agreement. In “their reproduction will definately affected,” the verb phrase is incomplete; use “will be affected.” The sentence beginning “Such as” is also not a complete sentence. Review sentence boundaries and check each clause for a clear subject and correctly formed verb while continuing to use varied structures.

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