Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

we no longer need to have animals kept in zoos , so the zoos should be closed. i realy disagree with this type of oppean. and it is not good for those animals who lived into the zoos.

reson, the zoos are the places where every kinds of animals are lived like a family. and the people who haired for the take care of those animals are create a close relation ship with animals and its is mine own experience animals are also love with their care takers and some animals are perform different types of shows to provide the entertainment who are watching out side of their cages. for example some perots in zoos are traned in this way thay talk with people and people give money of their care takers of their animals performance.

I DISAGREE, to close the zoos because the reson is quit simple those animals lived in zoos are home less, just imagine if all animals are released from zoos they run here and there and some animals run on the streets and damaged trees and create different types of difficulties for those people who traveled on the rode at the time and some small animals are hunted by people and some animals are involved into the rode accidents and it is a very dangerous movement for animals. i dis agree

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear disagreement in “I really disagree” and give relevant reasons: zoos provide care, and releasing animals could expose them to traffic and hunting. However, these points are only minimally developed. The claim that animals “lived in zoos are homeless” is not explained, and the example of trained parrots focuses on entertainment and donations rather than clearly showing why zoos should remain open. The response also does not consider the opposing view or explain how modern zoos might support conservation. The response contains 214 words, so it is 36 words below the 250-word minimum; 11 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each reason with clearer explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your position is repeated clearly, and the response has a basic sequence: you first discuss care and interaction in zoos, then explain possible dangers of releasing animals. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear, well-developed paragraphs, and the opening moves quickly from your opinion to a new point without a clear plan. Linking is often repetitive or awkward, as in “and” and “some animals” throughout the second argument. The example about parrots is inserted into the first reason without a clear explanation of how it supports your main claim. Use separate paragraphs for your position, each main reason, and a conclusion, and connect ideas with precise transitions such as “Furthermore” or “As a result.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “zoos,” “animals,” “care takers,” “cages,” and “released,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “animals” and “some animals” appearing frequently. Several spelling errors and inaccurate word choices strain the reader, including “oppean” for “opinion,” “perots” for “parrots,” and “rode” for “road.” Phrases such as “animals are also love with their care takers” and “a dangerous movement for animals” do not express your intended meaning naturally. Build a more precise range for discussing animal welfare and conservation, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences using “because,” “if,” and “for example,” but control is very limited, and frequent errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For instance, “every kinds of animals are lived” has problems with number and verb form, while “the people who haired for the take care … are create” contains several faulty structures. Other examples include “those animals lived in zoos are home less” and “some animals are involved into the rode accidents.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, including the long sentence beginning “just imagine if all animals are released.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build longer sentences with controlled clauses and correct subject–verb agreement.

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