Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Some people argue that animals should be in their natural habitat and are therefore pushing to have zoos closed down. Although they may be making a point, I believe that zoos play a major role in our awareness and conservation of animal life. In this essay, I will be discussing why there is no need for total shutdown of existing zoos.

Animal rights activists often justify that wild animals should be free from manipulation of human beings and should not be kept in enclosures while people marvel at their appearance and behavior. Poorly-managed zoos usually result to unsatisfacory conditions of animals. It is undoubtedly saddening to see lions, tigers and other animals deteriorate because of not being well-taken care of.

However, with the improvement of policies on zoo-keeping, we are seeing lesser situations where these animals are in their dreary state.

Zoos play important roles in education and conservation. People are given the opportunity to be educated on different wild animals and their needs. For instance, lions are not endemic in the Philippines and therefore, without zoos, children can only imagine these animals from books and television. But with educational field trip to zoos, they can have an actual encounter with these wild cats.

Additionally, there are many animal conservation efforts conducted in zoos. These controlled environment give chances for endangered species to recover and increase in numbers. For example, many Philippine eagles are now born in the sanctuary of zoos. In turn, we are now seeing more of these conservation efforts becoming fruitful.

In conclusion, if stringet rules and regulations will be enforced to existing and future zoos, the benefits of having them availabe for study and conservation surely will outweigh the consequences of totally eradicating their presence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your position is clear throughout: you oppose closing zoos, while acknowledging concerns about animal welfare. You address both sides and support your main reasons with relevant examples, including children in the Philippines learning about lions and conservation efforts involving Philippine eagles. This gives the response a clear, relevant argument. To develop it further, explain more specifically how improved policies protect animals, rather than stating generally that there are fewer cases of poor conditions. The eagle example would also be stronger with a little explanation of how zoo-based breeding or sanctuary work contributes to recovery. These additions would make the supporting ideas more fully developed and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The essay has a clear progression: it introduces the debate and your position, considers animal-welfare objections, presents education and conservation as benefits, and concludes with a recommendation. Paragraphing supports this structure, and transitions such as “However,” “For instance,” and “Additionally” help readers follow the argument. The links are generally effective, though some connections could be more explicit. For example, the paragraph about improved policies is brief and would connect more smoothly to the later benefits if you explained how regulation addresses the welfare concerns raised earlier. The conclusion also repeats the central position without drawing together the two main benefits. More deliberate links between claims and examples would make the progression feel more fully integrated.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of topic vocabulary, including “animal rights activists,” “enclosures,” “conservation,” “endangered species,” and “sanctuary.” These choices communicate the subject clearly, and some less common expressions show an effort to be precise. However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “justify that,” “result to,” “seeing lesser situations,” and “deteriorate because of not being well-taken care of.” There are also spelling errors in “unsatisfacory,” “stringet,” and “availabe.” Aim for natural combinations and check spelling carefully; for example, use “argue that,” “result in,” and “fewer cases.” This would make the vocabulary more fluent and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex structures, including the opening concession beginning “Although” and the conditional clause “if … rules and regulations will be enforced.” Most sentences remain understandable, and the grammar errors do not prevent the reader from following your argument. Some patterns, however, need more reliable control. In “These controlled environment give chances,” the plural subject requires “environments” and a more suitable verb pattern; “with educational field trip” needs an article or plural form; and “if … will be enforced” should use a present form after “if” for this conditional meaning. Review agreement, articles, and conditional structures, then proofread sentence by sentence to improve accuracy while retaining your complex forms.

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