Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is undeniable fact that, some rare spices of animals are disappearing from this globe due to the man-made destructions however, some individuals belive that we no longer required to lock the animals in zoo, so zoos must shut down. I strongly disagree with the statement because zoos plays a crusial role in education of society furthermore there are some animals which require special medication to get protected.

Firstly, the zoo is the house of many animals, rare specis and animals who are close to existinct. These animals could not be protected and healed by themself instead they need a special treatments and food resource to survive. For example, in the recent study of 'Times of India' state that, penguins are getting decline every year due to extream reducing temperature in Antartica where they unable to breed properly. Scientist suggest that this bird spices will extinct by 2050.

Additionally, the zoos play indispensible role to educate people specially children get to know about their favourite animal. Many zoo keepers invite people to feed and touch the wild animals to note there behaviour closely. For instance, Nehru Zooligical park invite people to visit the park completly free and also they a special area where you can with friendly wild animals like lions, tigers, etc. This encourages people about other species living matter in environment.

In conclusion, removing the zoo completely will not effect the animals but it can disturb the environment and our future generation cannot witness these rare species.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you strongly disagree with closing zoos, and you give two relevant reasons—animal protection and public education. The examples about penguins and Nehru Zoological Park help illustrate these points. However, the conservation argument is not fully explained: the penguin example describes a threat in Antarctica but does not show how zoos can protect or breed this species. The education point is also weakened by the unclear claim that visitors can interact with lions and tigers. The conclusion restates your view but makes a broad claim that removing zoos would disturb the environment without explaining the link. The response is also one word below the required minimum. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation and a more directly relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Additionally,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow, and each paragraph has a recognisable central topic. This meets the lower-band expectation for coherent organisation and shows some of the stronger control associated with a higher level. However, connections within sentences are sometimes awkward or mechanical, particularly where “however” and “furthermore” join several ideas in the introduction. Some references are unclear, such as “this bird species” after the penguin example and “This” in the final sentence of the education paragraph. Use shorter sentence units and make pronoun references explicit to improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “rare species,” “extinct,” “special treatment,” “behaviour,” and “environment,” and the reader can generally understand your main points. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “indispensable role.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the message less clear: “spices” for “species,” “existinct,” “crusial,” and “indispensible” are examples. Some combinations are also unnatural, including “food resource to survive” and “getting decline.” These issues limit precision and make the vocabulary less controlled than the ideas require. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations in context, such as “provide specialist care” and “the population is declining.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, complex sentences, for example the opening sentence and the explanation beginning “These animals could not be protected…”. This shows some range, and your overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, several sentence structures are faulty, especially when clauses are joined without clear punctuation or a complete grammatical pattern. There are also errors in agreement and verb forms: “zoos plays” should be “zoos play,” “the recent study … state” needs a singular verb, and “they unable to breed” needs “are.” Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a special treatments.” Aim for accurate basic clauses first, then combine them using controlled subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement.

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