Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, there is super needa of zoo due to decline in species of animal . zoos are essential because they helps in protection of the animal.

First of all, it is worth considering that zoo plays an important role in animals life because according to todays condition of the market every want to sell the animal parts such as horn or skin in black market to became rich so to avoid illegal activities moreover to save them from other animals for instance there is a bird community who are left with few if we left them with the same condition they will take approx max 2 month to finish however under supervision of zoo keeper they monitor ever and tru all possible outcomes to increase the species.

Although, it is undeniable that zoo has it his own drawbacks also like earlier zoo is just use for entertainment purposes not to protect them further more many illegal action were taken behind the zoo and they force the animal like tiger which having decent population they do just for the entertainment of people and money but later on there is not any alternative method to comserve the animals they just onlu jeed a perfect in there work .

In conclusion, zoo playw an important role in all term such as money or conservation however there is poetry grate things come with yhe great responsibility subsequently they just have to follow all the rules properly because of that we can improve the animals

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a broadly clear position in favour of keeping zoos, stating that they are “essential” for animal protection, and you give relevant reasons such as preventing poaching and supporting endangered species. The example of a bird population helps illustrate the conservation argument. However, the response addresses the question only partially: it does not clearly explain why zoos should remain open in contrast to the view that they are no longer needed, and the opposing point about zoos being used for entertainment is confusingly developed. Several claims, including that a species would disappear within two months, need explanation or a credible example. State your position more precisely and develop each reason with a clear explanation and relevant evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Phrases such as “First of all,” “Although,” and “In conclusion” signal stages in the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the first body paragraph moves from animal parts being sold to protection from other animals and then to a bird population without clearly showing how each point connects. Some linking expressions, including “moreover” and “however,” do not establish a clear relationship between the ideas that follow. Organise each paragraph around one main point, use shorter sentences, and make references such as “they” and “them” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “protection,” “illegal activities,” “black market,” “supervision,” and “conservation,” which shows an effort to discuss the issue beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and many word choices, collocations, and spellings are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “super needa of zoo,” “animal parts,” “finish” for a species dying out, and “poetry grate things,” which appears to be an unsuccessful attempt at a familiar expression. Spelling errors such as “comserve” and “onlu” also reduce clarity. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check that each word fits its meaning and grammatical form in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example, “because according to todays condition…” and “Although, it is undeniable…”. However, these complex attempts are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are not controlled consistently. There are frequent errors in agreement and verb forms, as in “zoos…they helps,” “zoo play,” and “they monitor,” as well as problems with articles and possessives in “animals life.” Several sentences run together without effective punctuation, making relationships between clauses hard to follow. Aim first for accurate simple sentences, then add one clearly structured subordinate clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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