Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is argued that animals have to be free from zoos and every kind of zoos ought to be ended.From my perspective, I am completely agree with this notion and my view point will be describe in the following paragraph.

To begin with, there are lot of reasons why I believe that animals has the right to be free as they are not getting enough needy things which is very important for them such care by there mother.If the animal still be confined , they might be died for less care .Leading to it could be very detrimental for them to keep alive.For instance a special bird called blue-game has disapred for taking them a long time in a closed cage.

What is more, There is a huge chance to extinct as a perticuler animal becouse of in the zoo, there are a lot of animals whic is not available in out side the might be completely die out from the environment. Morever, they often loss their ability to reproduce as they are kept in captivity in zoos ,consequently;even if animals to reproduce in captivity offspring are likely to remain stop as well.To illustrates some animals such as some tiger , elephant born in zoos may spend their entire life in zoos. For this reason government should take steps to close all kind of zoos so that animal s can reproduce naturally without being affected by captivity.

In conclusion, although other people believe shut down zoos can be affected in economy of country ,the benifits of relealing animals and closing zoos are far greater in significance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you completely agree that zoos should close, and the conclusion returns to the benefits of releasing animals. You give relevant reasons, including animals’ welfare and the effects of captivity on reproduction, and you attempt to support these with examples. However, some points are unclear or insufficiently explained. The claim that animals may die because they lack care from their mothers needs a clearer link to zoo conditions, while the “blue-game” example is difficult to understand and does not convincingly show that captivity caused its disappearance. The point about animals being unable to reproduce also needs qualification and evidence. Develop each reason with a precise explanation and a reliable example to make the argument more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting reasons, and a conclusion. The progression from animal welfare to captivity’s effects on reproduction is generally logical, and phrases such as “To begin with,” “What is more,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, some links between ideas are difficult to follow, particularly the movement from animals being unavailable outside zoos to their becoming extinct in the wild. The sentence beginning “Morever, they often loss their ability to reproduce” also combines several claims without clear connections. Use shorter, more clearly organised explanations and make pronouns such as “they” refer unmistakably to a specific group. This would make the overall progression easier to follow and reduce the mechanical feel of some transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “confined,” “captivity,” “reproduce naturally,” and “detrimental,” which helps communicate the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts of the argument difficult to interpret. For example, “needy things” is not a natural way to describe animals’ requirements, and “a huge chance to extinct” does not express the intended risk clearly. Errors such as “disapred,” “perticuler,” and “relealing” also reduce precision. Build a more reliable set of topic-specific collocations, such as “meet animals’ needs,” “face a risk of extinction,” and “release animals into the wild.” Check spelling and word forms carefully, especially in key claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at more complex structures, including a conditional idea (“If the animal still be confined…”) and a concession in the conclusion (“although other people believe…”). This shows an effort to vary sentence forms. However, some errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction make several sentences hard to understand. For example, “animals has the right” should use a plural verb, and “I am completely agree” has an incorrect verb pattern. The sentence beginning “Leading to it…” is a fragment, while “even if animals to reproduce” lacks a correctly formed verb. Practise building complete sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, then check punctuation and sentence boundaries so that complex ideas remain clear.

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