Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

We explain the animal don't be need in zoos. And give some advantage or disadvantage behalf on our opinion. Overall we explain all these things in this essay.

There are zoos in all country for kept animals for public. But there are some more reasons to kept animals in zoo. Some animal that are likely small amount in all world. So, the zoo import these animal from other country and forest to keep their live.

Therefore, i am agree with this thing that zoos should not kept these animal we lost these and could not be seeing in future. The concept of zoo is very important. Because they take care all animal that they need. They cares all things of animal like their food, normal temperature because some animal are lives in hot place or some are lives cold areas like white wolf. But on the other side i am also disagree with the zoos. There are some reasons that the some wild animal are not be able to live in zoos they are lives openly in forests.

Now, the advantage of zoos is that animals could not be finish from earth. Some example, the white panda, some species of wolf and rhino. On the other side zoos allow a local public like schools trip families and group of friends to visit the zoo an seeing these animal that have less amount in the world We think the concept is zoo is important we should not closed zoos we kept animal in the zoo

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the role of zoos, but the position is inconsistent. You state you agree that zoos should be closed, then immediately argue that they are important and should not be closed. This lack of a clear, sustained position makes it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. While you provide some relevant ideas, such as conservation and education, they are under-developed and lack specific supporting evidence or logical progression. To improve, ensure you choose one clear stance and support it with well-reasoned arguments throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The introduction is repetitive and does not clearly outline the essay's purpose. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition 'Therefore, i am agree with this thing'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult to follow the logic. To improve, use linking words like 'furthermore', 'however', or 'consequently' to connect your sentences and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, clear main idea.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and often repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'kept', 'animal', and 'zoo'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'the zoo import these animal' instead of 'zoos import these animals' and 'animals could not be finish' instead of 'animals could not become extinct'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. To improve, try to learn synonyms and collocations related to environmental and animal welfare topics to add variety and precision to your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('the animal don't be need'), tense usage ('they are lives openly'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation. While there is an attempt to use complex ideas, the lack of grammatical control makes the writing difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of auxiliary verbs, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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