Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, some people argue about keeping the animals in the zoo or it should be closed. In this trend animals should be keep for their safety.

On the other hand, keeping animal safe is the main priority. Some people believe that animals are being taken care off if they're in the zoo. For instance, we can provide good tourism and earn money to ensure we can provide adequate food and shelter for the animals. Furthermore, people only can handle cats and dogs and some wild animals we need to keep them on a safe place and should be handle by a professional. It will be hard for us, if they're not kept in zoo it might cause trouble. Especially the rare animals that needs to monitor. For example, there was a videos about rare animals that you will no longer see anywhere and should be kept and taken care of the person who has knowledge. People nowadays, would love looking at our creature in curiosity.

However, it will be hard if we don't have enough people who knows how to handle this danger species. Sometimes, they can live better in mountains with their family. However, it will be danger for them cause we have those people who go for hunting. For example, in the real story movies i watched, they put the animal back to the nature because they know t will benefit them instead of staying in a cage.

In conclusion, we should kept animals in the zoo for their safety and it will be benefit our tourism and we can provide better life for them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of keeping zoos. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you provide some reasons, such as animal safety and tourism, the arguments are often under-developed or lack logical depth. For instance, the mention of 'real story movies' as evidence is not an appropriate way to support an academic argument. Furthermore, the essay contains contradictory points, such as mentioning that animals might live better in the wild, which weakens your overall position. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported argument that directly reinforces your thesis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression between and within them is often unclear. While you use some cohesive devices like 'On the other hand' and 'Furthermore', they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not accurately reflect the relationship between ideas. The transition between the benefits of zoos and the potential drawbacks is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally confusing, such as the unclear use of 'they' and 'it' in the second paragraph, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Improved use of linking words and clearer sentence structure would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely on simple terms like 'good', 'safe', and 'hard', which limits the sophistication of your writing. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'handle this danger species' instead of 'dangerous species' and 'our creature' instead of 'wildlife' or 'animals'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the limited range of vocabulary prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to conservation, biodiversity, and animal welfare.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'animals should be keep'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'should be handle'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, with few successful attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors, such as 'Especially the rare animals that needs to monitor'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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