Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Today i discussed about the we no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be very closed . I write the about animal kept in zoos in because its no longer place for the animals .

Some people agree in this point that the animals kept in zoos because in the zoos no long place in the zoos and every animal is divided by blocked and there were no long place in the zoos. So the animals kept there and many animals died in the zoos .

Some people disagree in that case because the animals no kept in zoos because the animals is safe in zoos and now a day there are less verities of the animals than they safe in the zoos and every animals is divided into many blocked and the animals live there life pace fully and the animals is safe in other hunters and animals.

at all,

both have advantages and disadvantage some disagree in this point the animals is no longer kept in zoos and zoos is good place and the animals is safe in zoos. And the other hand the animal;s needed to more than more place to kept is place is forest and in the zoos there are less place and the animals kept there.

I am disagree in this point the animals is no kept in zoos because there was a good place for animals ans they safe in zoos but some time the animals is died there.;

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing whether zoos should be closed. However, the position is inconsistent and confusing. In the introduction, you state you are writing about the topic, but you do not clearly state your stance. In the body paragraphs, you present conflicting arguments without clear development or logical support. The conclusion contradicts the earlier sections, stating 'I am disagree in this point' while simultaneously acknowledging that animals die in zoos. The ideas are repetitive and lack the necessary depth or relevant examples required for a higher band score. To improve, ensure you take a clear position in the introduction and maintain it throughout the essay, supporting each point with specific, logical reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'in the zoos' and 'the animals'. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs are largely absent or mechanical, making the text difficult to follow. For example, the phrase 'at all' is used incorrectly to start the conclusion. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however') to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that contributes to your overall argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, which significantly limits the expression of ideas. There is a heavy reliance on simple words like 'place', 'animals', and 'safe'. Many phrases are used incorrectly, such as 'very closed' and 'divided by blocked'. There is no evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. To improve, you should expand your vocabulary by learning synonyms and word families. Focus on using more precise terminology related to the topic, such as 'conservation', 'captivity', 'natural habitat', and 'ethical concerns', rather than repeating the same simple words throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the animals is safe'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used are often marred by errors in tense and word order. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Practice writing simple, error-free sentences before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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