Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some people think that animals kept in zoos is not necessary so no longer need of zoo bur some are not. I disagree with this statement because zoo is must for that an9mals which ae not safe in open environment and important for wildlife education.
On the other hand, animals kept in zoo is safe for protected environment. They are protected from hunters and other danger life in the wild. Moreover, they receive regular food, clean water and medical care. Therefore, zoos can help to protect animals and improve their survival.
However, keeping animals in zoo also has some disadvantages; Animals may fee; stresses because that have limited space and cannot live in their natural habitat. In addition, some animal may not get enough freedom to behave naturally. therefore, zoos can also have negative impact on their life.
In conclusion, although zoos have some disadvantages, such as restricting animals’ freedom and preventing them from living in their natural habitats, I believe that they can still play an important role in protecting wildlife. Well-managed zoos can provide animals with proper food, medical care and a safe environment. They can also help people learn about endangered species and encourage wildlife conservation. However, zoos should ensure that animals have enough space and suitable conditions to live comfortably. Therefore, I believe that keeping animals in zoos can be beneficial if they are managed responsibly and the welfare of animals is given the highest priority.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, but it fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, coming in at 240 words. While the ideas regarding animal protection and education are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped. The introduction is particularly weak, containing several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that obscure the initial argument. To improve, you should expand on your supporting points with more specific examples or deeper analysis to ensure the word count is met and the arguments are fully explored.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand,' 'Moreover,' and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by grammatical inaccuracies and repetitive sentence structures. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is a bit abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother and more sophisticated.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'safe,' 'danger,' and 'good.' There are also some noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as 'an9mals' (typo), 'fee; stresses' (typo/grammar), and 'danger life.' To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to wildlife conservation, such as 'endangered species,' 'natural habitat,' 'biodiversity,' or 'ethical treatment.' Expanding your range of synonyms will help you express your ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'animals kept in zoos is not necessary' (subject-verb agreement), 'zoo is must' (missing article), and 'that have limited space' (incorrect pronoun). Punctuation errors, such as the semicolon usage in 'fee; stresses,' also detract from the quality. You need to focus on subject-verb agreement, proper article usage, and proofreading to eliminate these persistent errors.
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