Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Zoo is that place where people usually bring their children to show them beautiful species and they enjoy to see them. Zoo is that place where children learn many thing about animals and social things. Zoology students also go their because it is related to their studies such as they have to do assignments, making slides etc.

If zoo will not kept animals anymore then it should be closed. Because when there will be not animals then this will be useless. I agree with you. When zoo will not have species then no one will go there. Because there will nothing to learn about.

From my perspectives, Zoos have to keep animals if they want that people visit it. In zoos, there are many animals like monkeys, ostrich, lions and tigers. Children enjoyed to play with them such as they feed them some snacks and trickle them. Mostly people go there on weekends or holidays. Kids learns many things and information about animals. It just like a fun. Minors enjoyed to go there. I had also went their in my childhood with my family and siblings. I remember that I had fun there and also lost there. Then a security uncle helped me over there.

In conclusion, I'm 100% agree with you. Because zoo is that place where kids go to learn a lot of things and have enjoyed there. If zoos can't kept species anymore then zoos should be closed however it will be useless and no one go there.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a position, but the development is limited and repetitive. While you mention the educational value of zoos, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack depth. The essay relies on personal anecdotes, such as getting lost in a zoo, which is not appropriate for an academic task. Furthermore, the logic is circular; you state that if zoos do not have animals, they should be closed, which is a tautology rather than a reasoned argument. To improve, you should focus on broader societal or ethical arguments regarding animal welfare versus conservation and education, rather than focusing on the personal experience of visiting a zoo.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'Because' is used to start multiple sentences). Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'I agree with you'—the prompt is a statement, not a person you are debating. The conclusion simply restates the introduction without adding any synthesis. To improve, use a wider range of linking words like 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'on the other hand' to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. You frequently use simple words like 'place,' 'things,' and 'enjoyed.' There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'trickle them' (likely meaning 'tickle' or 'interact with') and 'security uncle.' The phrase 'social things' is vague and does not convey a clear meaning. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise, academic vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'conservation,' 'biodiversity,' 'ethical implications,' or 'educational resources,' rather than relying on informal or overly simplistic language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('zoo will not kept'), tense usage ('I had also went their'), and sentence structure ('Zoo is that place where...'). The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors. For example, 'If zoo will not kept animals anymore then it should be closed' contains multiple grammatical inaccuracies. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and the correct use of articles and prepositions, before attempting more complex structures.

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