Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people believe that animals and birds should not be kept in zoos and zoos should be closed. However, I disagree with the view, because at zoos animals who are on the verge of extinction can receive better treatment and also humans can deeply understand about the animal kingdom.

To begin with, zoo is an important place were endangered animals can receive better care facilities. Many animal species such as panda, rhinoceros and many other animals have lost their homes and natural habitats due to many reasons such as forest fire, drought, deforestation and many other. Also, they are not able to find food for themselves due to a smaller proportion of vegetations and other animals in the jungles and forests areas. However, when they are kept in zoos, they receive proper shelter, essential food items and water which are required for their survival. For example, few years ago, Asiatic lions were on the verge of extinction due to loss of their natural habitat. They were rescued by many Asian countries, who built zoos for them where they are receiving proper care.

Furthermore, human beings can closely understand about the wildlife which are kept in zoos. Many people especially children will be able to watch and understand about various animals and birds when they will visit the zoos. The children can learn about how animals look, behave and what food do they eat and many other such characteristics. For instance, I first visited the zoo when I was 5 years old. I still remember the various animals I saw there. This can help children to develop bonds and feelings towards the animals and become friendly towards another important element of nature.

In conclusion, zoos should not be shut down because it takes good care of endangered animals and humans can learn about the lifestyles and other characteristics of animals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have clearly stated your position in the introduction and maintained it throughout the essay. The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the role of zoos in conservation and the educational value for humans. Your arguments are relevant and supported by examples, such as the Asiatic lions and your personal experience visiting a zoo. To reach a higher band, you could further develop the counter-argument or provide more nuanced analysis regarding the ethical concerns of captivity, which would demonstrate a more sophisticated engagement with the topic. Overall, the task is well-addressed with a clear, consistent viewpoint.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph has a central theme, and you use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the use of referencing could be more varied. For instance, the repetition of 'many' and 'animals' at the start of sentences occasionally disrupts the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'endangered', 'extinction', 'natural habitats', and 'conservation' (implied). However, there is some repetition of basic words like 'many' and 'animals'. There are also minor collocation issues, such as 'understand about the wildlife' (should be 'understand wildlife') and 'smaller proportion of vegetations' (should be 'less vegetation'). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and avoid repeating common adjectives. Expanding your vocabulary to include more topic-specific synonyms will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are recurring grammatical errors. For example, 'zoo is an important place were' should be 'a zoo is an important place where', and 'what food do they eat' should be 'what food they eat'. Additionally, there are minor issues with article usage and pluralization, such as 'panda' instead of 'pandas'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct relative clause usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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