Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
There's an issue between no longer need to have animals kept in zoos and should be closed, and my stand is disagree.
Zoos nowadays is not popular tourist spot destination for public, however, zoos should remained open for some live animals that need to be kept and be take care of of human, Some animals need to increase their population due to reduce in number and prevent the its extinction. For instance Lions, this animals that can be found in Africa, hunters targeted this animal for their own personal reason.
However this animals remain untouch and liveby t
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, which severely limits your ability to develop your ideas. While you state a clear position ('my stand is disagree'), the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient detail. You mention conservation and protection for animals like lions, but these points are not expanded upon with logical reasoning or sufficient examples. Because the response is incomplete and fails to meet the minimum length requirement, it cannot fully address all parts of the task, resulting in a low score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas do not flow logically. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraph is abrupt. The text ends mid-sentence ('liveby t'), which indicates a lack of control over the overall organization of the response. To improve, you should focus on using linking words to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'live animals that need to be kept and be take care of of human' and 'reduce in number'. These errors occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. You rely on simple, everyday language and struggle to use more precise or academic vocabulary appropriate for an IELTS essay. Expanding your vocabulary and focusing on correct word forms will be essential for achieving a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Zoos nowadays is'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'There's an issue between no longer need to have animals kept in zoos and should be closed'. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. These frequent mistakes impede communication and make the text difficult to read. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors.
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