Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

We have need the animals kept in the zoo there are many reason about this I am disagree in the statement that the animals keep in the zoo.

I believe that the human save from the animals in the behind many reason first of all all the animals save in the zoo and every thing is available in the zoo if the any animals go out side all the human is fear from the animals who is give some hurts and injury. For example, the Lion is go to the busy place they get any create problem in the busy place. Second of all , if the animals walk in the forest alone they pick up and sold in the market in the high price this is very cheepest way . There are other many purpose people kept animals in the forest in the reason many animals left in the world . If the animals are in the forest this honer of the government . for example if the Markor is many in the country so other country see the Markor .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a clear position, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient depth. The points regarding human safety and poaching are mentioned but not effectively expanded upon with logical reasoning or clear examples. The response is too brief to fully address the complexity of the prompt, resulting in a fragmented argument that does not explore the counter-arguments or provide a comprehensive view of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt to use transition words like 'first of all' and 'second of all', the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and grammatical errors. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate distinct ideas, and the connection between sentences is often weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. The overall organization is disjointed, and the lack of cohesive devices makes the text feel like a series of disconnected statements rather than a cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. You rely on basic, repetitive words, and there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'human save from the animals' instead of 'protecting humans from animals' and 'cheepest way' instead of 'illegal practice'. The misuse of terms like 'honer' (honor/responsibility) and 'create problem' further hinders clarity. To improve, you need to focus on learning more precise vocabulary related to the topic and ensuring that words are used in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is highly problematic throughout the essay. There are frequent errors in sentence construction, verb tense, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'the Lion is go to the busy place' and 'I am disagree in the statement'. The lack of complex sentence structures and the prevalence of basic, error-ridden sentences make the writing difficult to read. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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