Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I will i'b very interesting this kind of information . And the information is that we no longer need to have anima kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed. The information is very interesting and i disagree in this statement and i give the some reason about this matter.

I disagree in this statement and i should longer need to have kept animals in zoos, because the zoos protect the animals in zoos. And animals is safe in zoos. so, we should be longer place for animals therefore they live there life fully. The zoos provide the food to the animals and different kind of things .

Secondly, the zoos increases there papulation of animals in zoos and then zoos treated then when they ill and they protect the dioggeret kind of things and the animals is safe in zoos other hunter animals so, the zoos is the best place for the animals . In zoos there are many kind of animals who some people could not see any were axpact on zoos . Therefore we should be longer need to animals kept in zoos .

I am agree that some zoos could not give the engouf space for animals in zoos and not proper care, food and medical treatment and other things . so , they should give the proper all the things they need for animals in zoos.

I think some zoos closed and the many large zoos in they protect the animals and give the proper things who they need and the animals is safe in this kind of zoos . And the closed zoos should be to give the protect things they needs to the animals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against closing zoos. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. While you mention animal protection and population growth, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The essay struggles to maintain a consistent academic tone, and some points, such as the mention of 'hunter animals' or 'dioggeret kind of things', are unclear, which hinders the full development of your position. To improve, focus on expanding your main points with concrete examples or logical explanations rather than repeating the same general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Secondly' and 'Therefore', but they are frequently used incorrectly or in a way that does not logically connect the sentences. For example, the transition between the second and third paragraphs is abrupt. Additionally, referencing is often unclear, such as the use of 'the information' at the beginning, which does not clearly refer to the prompt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic words like 'things', 'animals', and 'zoos' throughout the text. There are also several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'dioggeret' (likely meant 'different') and 'axpact' (likely meant 'except'). These errors, combined with the lack of variety, make it difficult to express complex ideas. To reach a higher band, you should work on using a wider range of vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'conservation', 'endangered species', 'habitat', and 'veterinary care', while ensuring correct spelling and usage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('animals is safe', 'zoos increases there papulation') and word order. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces placed incorrectly before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in almost every sentence makes the writing difficult to follow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and correct punctuation before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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