Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this modern era, some pupils beleive tt
zoos are necessary , should therefore be closed. but i disagree with this statment because zooz are procter dangerous animals . both paragraph discussed in the upcomming paragraphs.
To begin with, there are some benefits. first of all , zoos can procted endangerous animals because some people attect on them and distroy theirs homes . however zoos can help animals , get food , health care, increase numbers . it is a save place for animals live , therefore zoos are protected for animals .
Secondly, another benefits zoos is education. because of that children can see different type of animals and learn about their life style . they can get more information about wildlife.
in conclusion, i disagree with zees are closed. animals should be kept in protected environment .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely underdeveloped and falls well short of the 250-word minimum, containing only 139 words. Consequently, the length penalty severely impacts the score. While the student attempts to present a position disagreeing with the closure of zoos and touches upon relevant main points such as animal protection and education, these ideas are extremely brief, unsupported by specific examples, and lack adequate development. The introduction is confused by contradictory phrasing ("beleive tt zoos are necessary , should therefore be closed"), making the writer's stance partially unclear at first glance. Given the extremely limited extent of development and failure to meet the minimum length requirement, the performance falls under Band 4.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text demonstrates some basic paragraphing structure, attempting an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall organization is compromised by the brevity of the response. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, such as "To begin with", "first of all", and "Secondly". Referencing is frequently faulty, notably in sentences like "another benefits zoos is education. because of that children can see..." where punctuation and sentence boundaries are misused. Paragraphs lack internal logical progression due to underdeveloped supporting ideas and numerous structural disruptions. This fits the profile of a Band 4 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring numerous spelling errors such as "beleive", "tt", "zooz", "procter", "endangerous", "attect", "distroy", "theirs", "save", and "zees". The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like "endangerous animals", "health care", and "wildlife", but word choice and collocation are often inaccurate. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for expressing precise ideas, and spelling errors cause strain for the reader throughout. These features align closely with the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student uses a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural failures. There are persistent and severe errors in punctuation, capitalization, and sentence boundaries, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters ("in conclusion, i disagree...") and splitting dependent clauses with periods ("because of that children can see..."). Grammatical accuracy is very low, with frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and prepositions that often distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 4 score.
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