Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent year, the debate has arised that animal live in zoo however, the zoo are closed . I completely disagree with that because it will destroy the wildlife creatures life.As these points require prudent elaboration let us delve deeper into the impending paragraph .

To begin with , there are multifarious reasons that is why zoo are not prohibited. first and foremost, our new generation not contain sufficient iinformation about our all the traditional animal if they disappear . To elaborate, As we consider that if the wildlife community is completely lost then our upgrowing childs are get into the trap of the misguidance they not even see many of animals which is also make impact on their acadamics growth . As a result, they have obstruct to know about thoswe animals beacuse zoo are evn those thing which is well productive , because of the safety reaspms of animals . To illustarte, dr.sigmund freund, an eminent psychoanalyst, in his study on wildlife preservation , he assert that if wildlife has lost then our growing teenagers are destruct to identify those new type of breed of animals

furthermore, it also make trouble for more scientific researches. To elucidate, scientist wants many new animals for their general research . moreover the research helps to create many new medicines, vaccines . Although if the zoo are closed and animal are lost then it is big dilusion for the upcoming tetiary because it make obstruction in the formimg of many medicines it also made new strom in the field of the medical . Then medical proffesionist doctors wants and need new adaptation in their life .As a consequence, it forming many new diseases which includes new viruses or even traumas . to cite an example a survey conducted in the unicef in usa in may 2016, over group of the zoos and they assert that if zoo are closed then they got big trouble because it made many new problems

To encapsulate it can be concluded , that if the zoo are disappear then our teenagers not got specific information and even scientific research are also face trouble

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by clearly taking a stance against closing zoos and providing reasons to support this view, such as educational value and scientific research. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat confused by frequent lexical and grammatical errors. The second main body paragraph attempts to link zoos to medical research and vaccine creation, which is a relevant idea, though it is expressed with significant strain. Examples provided, such as the mention of Sigmund Freud or a UNICEF survey from 2016, are somewhat tangential or incorrectly attributed, affecting the depth of task fulfilment. Overall, the ideas are present and a position is maintained, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion, showing an awareness of paragraph structure. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, mechanical cohesive devices (such as 'To begin with', 'To elucidate', 'To encapsulate'), and referencing errors. For instance, phrases like 'the impending paragraph' or 'that is why zoo are not prohibited' create confusion. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is often faulty and repetitive, resulting in a score of 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and prone to frequent errors in word choice, collocation, and form. Examples include 'arised' instead of 'arisen', 'dilusion' instead of 'delusion', and 'proffesionist' instead of 'professionals'. The writer attempts some less common items such as 'multifarious', 'psychoanalyst', and 'preservation', but these are often used inaccurately or forced into unnatural contexts. These noticeable errors and limited control over word formation cause some difficulty for the reader, aligning with the Band 5 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('zoo are closed', 'scientist wants'), tense consistency ('if the zoo are disappear'), and missing articles. For example, sentences such as 'our upgrowing childs are get into the trap of the misguidance they not even see many of animals' demonstrate a lack of control over basic syntax. Errors are very frequent and constantly impede communication, justifying a Band 4.0 for this criterion.

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