Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The debate on the wild animal zoo should be permananetly shut down or some better ways find to save those animals from their disapperence. There are many reasons to save wild life because if we close the zoos.Thay would released into the forests and could be hunted by someone , also it will be very dangeours for near by socities.
To begins with, some creatures are become extinct day by day, and zoo is only the one place which can kept them save. zoo provide every single facilties and healthcare checkup on daily routiens for those animals. Moreover, global warmming and extinction of trees make their live too much harmful in the jungles. Whereas, zoos are the safest place to live in for them, with enough range of food and area also
On the other hand, some time of zoo's put animals into the small cage. which make those wild lives very uncomfortable to stay in small place for long time , and its also become the reason that, they become unheathy and not be able to follow their daily routines. So, athurities should take a strict decision towards them. we need to make sure that they feel free to go anywhere in that zoo area which are made for them.
In conclusion, it clears that zoo should me provide every single thing for the wild animals. wild safari parks and sanctuary should be make properly so that they can walk around anywhere freely but stirct rules should also apply into the zoos ensure their safety purpouse.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt regarding whether zoos should be closed, taking a clear stance that zoos remain necessary for animal protection and conservation, provided they are improved. The writer puts forward relevant ideas, such as the dangers of releasing animals into the wild due to hunting and global warming, as well as acknowledging counter-arguments regarding small cages. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and lacks extension, resulting in a somewhat brief and generalized treatment of the topic. For instance, the discussion on animal welfare issues in cages is introduced but not fully explored. Nevertheless, all parts of the task are addressed, earning a Band 6.0 under the task achievement descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay displays an overall coherent arrangement with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is attempted, though some formatting irregularities exist in the student's layout. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'To begins with', 'Moreover', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, referencing and transitions are at times faulty or mechanical, and mechanical errors in punctuation and spacing detract from the smooth flow of the text. The progression of ideas is occasionally disrupted by awkward sentence boundaries and phrasing, placing this firmly at Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts to incorporate less common items such as 'extinction', 'global warming', and 'sanctuary'. However, there is a high frequency of spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'permananetly', 'disapperence', 'Thay', 'dangeours', 'facilties', 'routiens', 'live' instead of 'lives', 'athurities', and 'stirct'. These errors occasionally impede communication and show limited control over word formation and collocation, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 5.0 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some attempt at subordination and relative clauses. However, grammatical accuracy is notably weak, with frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles (e.g., 'zoo is only the one place which can kept them save', 'some creatures are become extinct', 'some time of zoo's put animals', 'wild safari parks and sanctuary should be make properly'). These recurring errors cause difficulty for the reader and mean that error-free sentences are infrequent, aligning with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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