Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Zoos are the places where every child in his childhood wants to visit.Every child have a craze to see animals which he just saw in his books.I disagree with the statement of the zoos should be closed.
Closing the zoos is just like we are closing all our childhood memories.A person when he is child,he just remembered the activities that aknowleged him.When a child visits a zoo he saws animals in his real life with his eyes and he remember these activities when he is adult.Now a days people think that there is no need of zoos because they donot have developed their childrens minds to visit these sights that are exiciting and are rememberable.
On the other hand adults also like to visit places like zoos as they do small picnics there and make some memories.These places are made for enjoyment for every kind of people living in our society.People make palns for outing and the first place comes in the mind for visiting is zoo becuase people enjoy alot there and are very happy after seeing the wild animals.
Wild animals are the animals which are founded in different areas of Globe.Most of them are found in Africa.Zoos have wild animals so they people who cannot go these places can just visit zoo to see these animals.If we donot have zoos,how people can expereince the environment of the jungle and the jungle animals.
In my opinon we should have to continue teh journey of zoos instead of closing them becuase it is a spot where every kind of people can go and enjoy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by clearly taking a position ('I disagree with the statement of the zoos should be closed') and supporting it with reasons such as childhood memories, recreational value for adults, and educational opportunities regarding wildlife. However, the development of ideas remains somewhat superficial and repetitive, particularly regarding childhood nostalgia and general enjoyment. While the core arguments are relevant and the position is maintained throughout, the ideas are not fully extended with sophisticated examples or deep analysis, placing the response firmly at Band 6.0 in accordance with the task achievement descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing different aspects of the topic (children, adults, and educational access), and a concluding statement. Paragraphing is attempted, though some paragraphs lack internal structural cohesion. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'On the other hand', 'When a child...', 'If we donot have zoos...'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as pronoun ambiguity in phrases like 'so they people who cannot go these places can just visit zoo'. Overall progression is present, supporting a Band 5.5 score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to express basic opinions and arguments ('wild animals', 'environment', 'childhood memories', 'outing'). However, the range is limited and repetition of common words occurs frequently (e.g., 'zoo', 'animals', 'visit'). There are notable word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'aknowleged him' instead of 'educated him' or 'informed him', 'saws' instead of 'sees', and 'founded' instead of 'found'. Spelling errors like 'rememeber', 'exiciting', 'rememberable', 'palns', and 'opinon' further restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional clauses ('If we donot have zoos, how people can expereince...'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Every child have', 'so they people who cannot go'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions. Punctuation and spacing issues are also prevalent throughout the text (e.g., missing spaces after periods and commas). Because these errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, the performance aligns with Band 5.0.
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