Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In todays modern world keeping animal in captivity in zoo has become a widely discussed issue has gained considerable attention. Although restricting animals in zoo is very benefical for animals and humans but captured in one place causes stress and effect health of wild animals.

In a living world, keeping animals in zoo helps us to conserve naturaal species and save endangered species which protect the species and help increasing their population by natural or artifical breeding. Animals stay in zoo also used to educate students to study about their behaviour, habitat and importance of wild life. Furthermore it also used for scientific researche with proper licensing. humans can freely live their life with out any threat or fear of been attacked.

On the other hand, animals have rights similarly humans have ,which will need to be protected. animals have right of freedom to live in whatever habitat or place they wants to. we cannot take them out of their habitat, this keeps their freedom limited and away from them. secondly, animals feel protected in their own wild territory if we keep them out of their territory, it affects them and leads to poor health conditions, it disturbs their mental peace as well and they live in fear and feel stress all the time. Restricted to one cage makes animals life so difficult because they created to live in their own space like in forests where they live wildely. Nature created every species in a very diffrent way For instance, birds cannot live in one place all time , they fly all time make nests and collect food for their babies.

To sum up, we conclude that to keep animals in zoo to conserve the endangered species and habitat ,but other than that animals are not made to keep them in cage. It is better to keep them live in their own habitat and enivornment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the question by presenting benefits of zoos, including conservation, education and research, before arguing that animals should live in their natural habitats. Your conclusion makes your preference clear, so the response covers the main parts of the task. However, the position is not fully consistent: the opening says captivity can benefit animals and humans, while the conclusion opposes keeping animals in zoos without clearly distinguishing conservation-focused facilities from ordinary captivity. Some points also need fuller explanation. For example, you mention breeding endangered species but do not explain when this is effective or how it supports your view on closing zoos. Develop the central argument and clarify your position throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on the benefits of zoos, a paragraph on animal welfare, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of your argument. You also use linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up.” At times, however, connections are mechanical or unclear. The opening sentence combines several ideas without a clear relationship, and the shift from conservation benefits to opposing zoos is not fully reconciled. Within the animal-welfare paragraph, several claims are joined in a long sequence, making the progression harder to follow. Use clearer topic sentences and divide or connect supporting points according to their relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “endangered species,” “artificial breeding,” “scientific research,” “habitat,” and “territory.” These choices show an adequate range for discussing zoos and animal welfare. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “mental peace” and “natural or artificial breeding,” though some combinations are not natural or precise in context. Spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, for example “benefical,” “naturaal,” “wildely,” and “enivornment,” and phrases such as “animals stay in zoo” and “restricted to one cage” are awkward. These do not prevent the main ideas from being understood, but more accurate collocations and careful proofreading would make the argument clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “species which protect the species” and conditional structures such as “if we keep them out of their territory.” This gives the response some structural variety. However, errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles and punctuation occur across the essay. For example, the opening sentence has an incomplete, confusing structure, while “the place they wants to” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “animals have right of freedom,” the article and plural form are not controlled, and several sentences run together without clear punctuation. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate complex sentences and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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