Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is an ongoing debate related to animals preservation whether they should keep in the zoos or keep them in open spaces like forrest or any safaris. And, some people think that zoos should be closed because of the alternative options. I completely disagree with this view because zoos are a great source for learning about cultures and wild animals.

One of the major reasons is to keep zoos remain open, is that they provide much information about wild species and animals. Adult and children both can get the oppotunities to see the wild animals up close and also learn about their behaviour and survival. For example, many people read about wild animals in their textbooks, so this knowledge can be helpful when they watch the animals closely. Also, some zoos preserve many rare species which seems to be extincted. If authorities take good care of them, it would be a great way for a country's economy. They can export those species to other countrys and generate huge amounts of profit.

On the other hand, some zoos are so brutal to taking care of animals. They cannot provide enough food to animals, as a result animals are losing their original outlook and physical strength. Therefore, government should provide enough funding to save the animals. Also, the international organizations could help the zoos authorities to preserve the animals with care and affection.

In my view, zoos play a crucial role to learn about the history and behaviour of a animals. So, zoos should not be closed, even the entrance fee should be free or so low that a middle class or student can afford it, which encourage people to visit more and know about animals history and survival.

In conclusion, visiting to zoos can be both educational and enjoyable experiences for people. A country's financial development depends on several factors and zoo is one of them. So, keeping zoos open are beneficial not only for individuals but also for a country's economy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: you completely disagree with closing zoos, and the conclusion maintains this view. You address the central issue with relevant reasons, especially education and the preservation of rare species, and you acknowledge concerns about animal welfare before proposing funding and support. This covers the task well. However, some points are less fully developed than others: the claim that zoos benefit a country’s economy through exporting species is asserted without explaining how this would work or addressing possible conservation concerns. The animal-welfare paragraph also shifts towards solutions without showing why these problems do not justify closure. Develop these points with specific, relevant examples to make the argument more convincing and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, separate body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The progression from educational benefits to animal-welfare concerns and then your final position is easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “For example,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion.” At times, however, connections feel mechanical or the reference is unclear. For instance, “some zoos preserve many rare species which seems to be extincted” does not clearly identify what “which” refers to, and “So” begins conclusions in both the final body paragraph and the conclusion. Use pronouns with clear antecedents and vary transitions; also make the relationship between each example and the main claim more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “wild species,” “behaviour,” “survival,” “preserve,” and “physical strength,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “rare species” and “financial development.” However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less natural: “animals preservation,” “open spaces like forrest,” “extincted,” and “countrys” are examples. Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “a great source for learning about cultures” when the argument is mainly about wildlife. Aim for accurate topic collocations and check spelling and word forms; this will make your vocabulary more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “because,” “as a result,” and “which,” and the overall meaning is usually clear. Some sentences are controlled, such as “I completely disagree with this view because zoos are a great source for learning about cultures and wild animals.” However, there are some errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms. For example, “One of the major reasons is to keep zoos remain open” has an incorrect construction, while “Adult and children both can get” and “keeping zoos open are beneficial” show agreement problems. “A animals” also has an article and number error. Review these patterns and proofread each sentence, while continuing to use a mix of sentence structures.

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