Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Zoos have been one of the most popular tourist attractions since old times, but some individuals believe in the closure of zoos because trapping animals in zoos are no longer needed. I believe in a neutral approach which does not neccessarily deprives an animal of its natural habitat by keeping them in enclosed spaces but also helps people to monitor species, keeping track of their health conditions and protecting from endangerment.

Zoos used to be one of the most popular tourist places in an area which is because of the curiosity that they induced in people. Individuals and families wanted to visit zoos because they were curious about different animal species, especially because of how distinct they look from one another and from humans themselves. As a result, zoos always had a high number of families with kids visiting them, thus making it a successful tourist attraction. Moreover, the animals displayed in zoos were well fed and taken care of, preventing them from catching harmful diseases.

In recent times, many individuals have developed a belief that animals should not be deprived of their natural habitats by keeping them locked up behind cages and walls and be let free in the forest where they belong. People believe that depriving animals of their natural habitats makes them lose their natural ability to navigate different terrains and hunt for their own food. For example, a lion cub born at the zoo will lose its natural ability to hunt because meals are served directly in the cage and therefore loses its naturally developed instincts.

In my opinion, animals should be monitored in an open and artificial space which replicates the natural habitat of different species. One of the most prominent examples of this approach are national parks, these are large habitats which are used by people to monitor the well being of different species without keeping them in an enclosed space and keeping them open for tourists to visit.

In conclusion, although zoos used to be well known tourist attractions, some people believe that animals should not be caged and be allowed to roam free. Therefore , the construction of national parks and wildlife sanctuaries may prove to be an effective solution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is that zoos should not simply continue in their conventional form, and that national parks offer a compromise. This responds to the agree/disagree question and is supported with relevant points about animal welfare, hunting instincts, monitoring, and tourism. The lion-cub example helps explain why captivity may affect animals’ behaviour. However, the position is described as “neutral,” so it is not fully clear how far you agree with the claim that zoos should close. The benefits of monitoring animals are also asserted rather than explained in detail, and the national-park proposal could be linked more explicitly to whether existing zoos should be closed. State your degree of agreement directly and develop the main reasons more evenly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, paragraphs on the appeal and drawbacks of zoos, a proposed alternative, and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress in a sensible order, and examples such as the lion cub and national parks help connect claims to the topic. Some linking is mechanical or repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “Moreover,” “As a result,” and “Therefore.” The first body paragraph focuses largely on zoos’ popularity and care of animals, while the next shifts to the opposing view; clearer topic sentences could make this contrast more deliberate. There are also occasional unclear references, such as “these” after “national parks.” Use more precise referencing and transitions that show the relationship between ideas rather than simply adding them.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “natural habitats,” “endangerment,” “navigate different terrains,” and “wildlife sanctuaries.” These choices allow you to discuss animal welfare and conservation, and the meaning remains clear. There are, however, some inaccurate or unnatural collocations and word choices: “believe in the closure” is less natural than “support closing,” while “tourist places” and “induced in people” do not fit the intended meanings smoothly. “Well being” should be written as “well-being,” and “neccessarily” is misspelled. Aim for more precise, natural phrasing and check spelling, especially when using less familiar vocabulary. This would make the argument sound more fluent and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “because,” “although,” and “therefore,” and most of the argument is understandable. Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “trapping animals in zoos are no longer needed” has a subject–verb agreement problem, and “One of the most prominent examples … are national parks” should use a singular verb. The sentence beginning “One of the most prominent examples” also joins two independent clauses with a comma. In “a lion cub … and therefore loses,” the pronoun reference and verb agreement are unclear. Review agreement, sentence boundaries, and pronoun references, while retaining your attempts at complex sentences. These corrections would improve accuracy without requiring simpler ideas.

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