Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people believe that we no longer need animals kept in zoos, and therefore we should close them.

Zoos give a lot of people the opportunity to learn about different animals and their habitat. The zoos give people living in different countries an opportunity to look at and interact with animals that naturally lives in a different part of the world. If a school class is learning about different types of animals, they would have a much bigger learning outcome by being able to look at them in real life. Most of the children in primary school would find it more exciting and interesting going to the zoo than listen to their teacher talk about every animal. They would also get the opportunity to listen to qualified employes of the zoo talk about them.

The zoos are also an activity for families with children. Animals have and will always be a big part of the childhood. Children these days are exposed to screens everywhere. If the zoos dissapear, it would be another reason for parents to turn on the TV or use a tablet to entertain their children. Almost every TV program for children includes one or more animals, and an easy resoultion for the parents would be to turn on the TV. By families being able to visit zoos with their children, the children would have something to look forward to other than watching them on a screen. This is a great opportunity for families to go outside while doing something together. It is also a nice family activity for families with children in a wide range of age.

Zoos gives us the opportunity to learn and create curiosity in a different way. We should rather focus on supporting zoos that gives safe homes, food, and care to animals, than closing them down.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you oppose closing zoos, and the conclusion reinforces this by recommending support for zoos that provide animals with safe homes and care. The educational value of seeing animals and the benefits of a family outing are relevant reasons, with examples such as school visits and children’s interest. This covers the task well, but the reasons are not equally developed: the family-entertainment point relies heavily on the claim that parents might otherwise use screens, while the educational point could explain more about what visitors learn. The response also does not address the central concern implied by the prompt—whether keeping animals in captivity is justified. A fuller discussion of animal welfare and how responsible zoos protect animals would make the argument more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. The progression from education to family activities is easy to follow, and phrases such as “also” and “By families being able to visit” help connect ideas. However, some links are repetitive or mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “opportunity” and “also.” The second body paragraph moves from children’s screen use to family outings without fully explaining the connection, so the reasoning feels somewhat abrupt. References such as “them” in “watching them on a screen” could also be clearer. To strengthen cohesion, use more varied transitions and make the relationship between each example and its main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “habitat,” “qualified,” and “curiosity.” However, the range is limited by repeated general words and phrases, especially “opportunity,” “children,” and “animals,” and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural. For example, “a much bigger learning outcome” is not a natural collocation, and “a different way” does not specify how zoos encourage learning. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “employes,” “dissapear,” and “resoultion.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy and polish. Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully; alternatives such as “educational benefit” and “conservation efforts” would help express your ideas more specifically.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If a school class is learning…” and “If the zoos disappear…”. Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors persist. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “animals that naturally lives” and “Zoos gives us”; these should be “live” and “Zoos give.” The construction “more exciting and interesting going to the zoo than listen” also needs parallel forms, such as “more exciting to go … than to listen.” In “than closing them down,” the verb form should be parallel with “supporting” (“than closing them down” is acceptable only if the comparison is framed consistently). Review agreement and parallel structures, while continuing to use varied sentence patterns.

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