Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Yes it should be zoo are just made where endenger species kept under observent who care alot to grow them and their breeds increase under special care and then they release free of care in natural enviroment.So their population spread in nature.

The animals should be live in nature so it maintain the beatuy in nature and attract the mankind they know how animals live and servive before human because many people not know and experices the animal live without cage and their relationship with other animals how they prey predator relationship.Animals adopt different ecosytem in sesional change or any other weather extrem condition people able to see.

In my country a few animals you see living in natural ecosystem otherwise we see in cage in zoo.

Their is no animal you in natural ecosystem because of hunting people hunt just for fun activity other for their adventage like black dear have special chemical in its body which use in medicine to peope hunt and its population about to vanish. And you will not able to experices any animals relationship with other animals or other seasional meigration to animals.

So zoo must be colse and animals must be kept in natural enviroment and teams hired for their take care if their any need to diseased animals and government must be take strict action against the hunter so we can enjot the life of animals and their relation and corelation and experience life before human race it will the great expercience if government work in that area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a position in favour of closing zoos and give relevant reasons, including the value of animals living in natural habitats and the threat of hunting. The example of the black deer adds a specific detail, and you suggest government action and care for sick animals. However, the argument is only partly developed: the opening claim that zoos breed endangered species and release them is not reconciled with your conclusion that zoos should close. The benefits of observing animal behaviour are mentioned, but the link to closing zoos is unclear, and the proposed alternative needs fuller explanation. Develop a consistent position and explain how conservation and animal care could continue without zoos.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable overall direction: it discusses animals in nature, gives a country-specific example, and ends with recommendations. However, progression between these points is difficult to follow. The opening sentence combines several claims, while the paragraph beginning “In my country” shifts abruptly to hunting without clearly connecting the example to the argument. Linking words such as “So” and “otherwise” are used, but relationships between ideas are often unclear, and references such as “their” and “it” do not always identify what they refer to. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one main point in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “endangered species,” “natural ecosystem,” “predator relationship,” and “seasonal migration,” which shows an effort to discuss conservation and animal behaviour. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make meaning difficult to understand, such as “their breeds increase,” “for their adventage,” and “relationship and corelation.” Spelling errors, including “enviroment,” “experiences,” and “extrem,” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, describe animals as “breeding in captivity” and later “being released into the wild,” rather than saying their breeds increase. More precise vocabulary would help express your ideas without repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the reader work to understand the meaning. Examples include “the animals should be live,” “so it maintain,” and “government must be take strict action,” where verb forms and agreement are faulty. Sentence boundaries are also unclear: the opening runs several ideas together, and the sentence beginning “The animals should…” contains multiple clauses without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “while,” or “which.” Check subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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