Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Zoos should be shut down as animals should not be kept in the cages. I truly agree with this statement as I think the captivity of animals in cages cause many problems for them and the care takers do not take care of them properly.

Animals have an equal right to live on Earth rather than becoming a thing for entertinment of the people. Animals that are kept in the cages become more wild and depressed, although, they are given proper food and water, however, they become agressive and miss moving independently in open areas. Moreover, people only see animals as an entertainment and joy purposes for them and their children. For example, there is a zoo in my city consisting of different animals, however, these animals are very weak and look very thirsty in the hot weather, despite of the fact that they are taken care off.

Some animal species are endangered and near to extinction, such animals should not be kept in zoos, instead they should be kept in open environment under survillence so that they can interbreed freely and produce their offsprings. For example, there was only one elephant left in my country's zoo, it was sent to China a year ago so that its specie could be saved.

To conclude with, zoos should not be the house of endangered species, in fact, if a zoo is very important for human than it should be made safe enough for the animals so that animals would not become depressed and unhappy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you agree that zoos should close because captivity harms animals, and you maintain this view in the conclusion. You give relevant reasons about animals’ welfare and the protection of endangered species, supported by examples from a local zoo and the elephant sent abroad. This addresses the task, but the two main arguments are not developed equally. The claim that animals become “more wild and depressed” is asserted without explaining how captivity causes these effects, and the example of the elephant does not clearly show why closing zoos is preferable to improving conservation facilities. To strengthen the response, explain each example’s relevance and address the tension in your final point that a zoo may be important if it is made safe for animals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present reasons, and a conclusion returns to the issue. The progression from animal welfare to endangered species is generally logical, and examples are placed alongside the relevant claims. However, some linking is mechanical or confusing. In “although … however,” two contrasting linkers are used together, while “moreover” introduces a related point without making the relationship especially clear. References such as “such animals” and “it” require the reader to infer exactly which species or animal is meant. The final sentence also shifts from arguing for closure to suggesting that zoos may remain open, leaving the conclusion less decisive. Use simpler, more precise transitions and make the relationship between your position and this qualification explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to discuss animal welfare and conservation, including “captivity,” “endangered,” “extinction,” and “interbreed.” These choices show an attempt to use topic-specific language, and your meaning is generally understandable. However, several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision: “a thing for entertinment,” “for entertainment and joy purposes,” and “taken care off” are not natural expressions, while “survillence” and “offsprings” are misspelled or incorrectly formed. “More wild” is also an imprecise way to describe the effects of captivity. Build accuracy by learning common phrases such as “kept in captivity,” “for public entertainment,” and “under close supervision,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “as,” “although,” and “so that.” This gives the response some structural variety, and the main ideas can usually be followed. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “the captivity of animals in cages cause” should use a singular verb, and “if a zoo is very important for human” needs a more appropriate article and plural form. The sentence beginning “Animals that are kept … although” combines contrasting clauses awkwardly, and “so that animals would not become” does not fit smoothly with the conditional structure. Aim for accurate, complete sentences first, then use complex clauses selectively and check agreement and article use.

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