Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

some people argue that we no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

i agree with that because it gives freedom to animal . and lead them to their normal life which basic right of every living things .

firstly i agree with this point of view that zoos must be closed and animals should be free new vans and vehicles should introduce in forests so if some one wats to see animal he must go in that vans however it also improve tourism economy of country like africa if some one is enthusiast of animals he can see them hunting.

secondly closing zoos provide freedom to animals because it free them from living in small cages not habitat so they get stressed depressed which lead them to mental illnesses as they are living things in forests like amazon they can live with their family have childrens . animals in zoo are sleepy leazy children can learn negative things from this . the main educational purpose is showing them safari documentaries

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you agree that zoos should close, and you give relevant reasons, including animals’ freedom and the stress caused by small cages. The suggestions about safari vehicles and documentaries also relate to tourism and education. However, these ideas are only briefly stated and are not supported with specific examples or explanation; for instance, the claim that safari vehicles would improve a country’s economy needs development. The response addresses the task only partially because the arguments remain limited and under-developed. It also contains 162 words, which is 88 words below the 250-word minimum; the 15 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop each reason with explanation and an example, and add a conclusion that reinforces your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response states a position, then introduces points with “firstly” and “secondly.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the order of ideas. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the long sentences combine several points without showing how they connect. For example, the first body paragraph moves from freedom to safari vehicles, tourism, and hunting with little explanation of the links. The second paragraph shifts from animal stress to family life, children’s learning, and documentaries. Use separate paragraphs for distinct arguments, build each around one main idea, and use linking phrases to clarify cause and effect. A brief conclusion would also make the structure feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “freedom,” “cages,” “habitat,” “stressed,” and “mental illnesses,” so the reader can understand the main concerns. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “free new vans,” “animals can see them hunting,” and “animals in zoo are sleepy leazy” are unclear or imprecise. Aim for accurate, natural expressions such as “safari vehicles,” “observe animals in the wild,” and “animals in zoos may become inactive.” Check spelling and choose vocabulary that expresses the intended meaning precisely; this will make your arguments easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including a relative clause in “which lead them to mental illnesses” and a reason clause beginning “because.” However, the range is limited, and attempts to combine ideas often produce faulty sentences. Errors include missing or incorrect articles and plurals (“animal,” “every living things”), subject–verb agreement (“which lead”), and incomplete or poorly punctuated sentence structures. The opening “i agree with that because it gives freedom to animal” also has unclear reference and grammatical control. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately using conjunctions and relative clauses; check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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