Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is frequently argued that keeping animals in zoos is not justified and that zoos should be permanently shut down. I completely agree with the idea, even though keeping animals in zoos may have several reasons linked back to them but keeping them away from their natural habitat can't be justified.

First and foremost, a primary factor to consider is that locking up animals in zoos is quite obviously against nature and their will. Locking them up means permanently stealing their natural habitat and environtment which is against the laws of nature. Furthermore, it disrupts the food chain of the forests and eliminates their role that the play in keeping the earth a healthy and balanced planet. For instance, locking up an animal or a type of bird in the zoos that may have been able to kill or eat a dangerous micro-organism or a type of insect would even endanger human life on earth.

Moreover, keeping them in zoos is against their will. Not all animals want to interact with humans or want to be fed on artificial forms of food. They are fed at specific times which basically kills their ability to catch a pray, live independently and survive by their own with their specific survival instincts and the environment the are adapted to. Most of these animals for example an elephant may not be kept in favourable or the best conditions at all or maybe a the temperature and climate of where the zoo is located may not be suitable for a polar bear.

Hence, it can be concluded that zoos are a place for entertainment but it does not justify keeping animals away from their natural lifestyle. Animals have their own will and way of living in the wild and therefore the only way to acieve this and make sure animal rights are not stolen are by permanent shudown of zoos.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I completely agree”) and remains consistent in the conclusion, and you give relevant reasons concerning animals’ natural habitats, independence and unsuitable zoo conditions. The examples of an elephant and a polar bear help make the second reason more concrete. However, some claims are asserted rather than explained: the link between removing animals from forests and disrupting the food chain, for example, needs a clearer explanation or a more specific example. The point about animals’ “will” also overlaps with the loss of natural behaviour, so it could be developed into a distinct argument. Addressing the possible benefits of zoos, such as conservation or education, before explaining why they do not outweigh the harms would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting reasons, and a concluding restatement of your view. Sequencing phrases such as “First and foremost,” “Furthermore,” and “Moreover” make the progression easy to follow, and the examples are placed alongside the relevant points. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some flexibility in linking ideas. At times, however, connections are mechanical or unclear. The sentence beginning “For instance” introduces a hypothetical example whose relationship to the food-chain claim is not fully explained, while “Hence” moves quickly to the conclusion without drawing the two arguments together. Use clearer references and explain how each example supports its paragraph’s main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “natural habitat,” “food chain,” “survival instincts,” and “animal rights,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “permanently shut down” and “favourable conditions.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise, however: “reasons linked back to them,” “fed on artificial forms of food,” and “catch a pray” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “environtment,” “acieve,” and “shudown” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural combinations—for example, “reasons in their favour,” “an artificial diet,” and “catch prey”—and proofread spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including a concession in the introduction (“even though…”) and longer sentences explaining consequences. Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in these longer constructions. For example, “the role that the play” has an incorrect subject, and “the environment the are adapted to” contains an incorrect pronoun and an incomplete relative construction. The sentence beginning “Not all animals want…” is followed by a fragment, “They are fed at specific times,” which would be clearer when joined to the explanation that follows. There are also article and sentence-boundary problems in “maybe a the temperature.” Check subject–verb and pronoun agreement, articles, and clause boundaries, while keeping complex sentences manageable.

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