Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Today some people agree zoos are still open for entertainment purpose and educational information but i completely agree with the zoos should be closed because animal are not live in these situations animal always truly live in wild place where live happy small place always made them too week and increase the laval of death when we kept animals in awild place and independently definatly its made them free and they live in natural environment

that's very good for them one reason also there some animal's have a paw's and this is very harmful for human some time children aslo go to see zoo animals and these animals can also hit them .

Now these days we can't go in a zoo to see animals because it's a time of social media and internet we can see everything in a tv program and discovery channel there provide any informative video we can teach everything from these paltform.

we should kept animals in their save places where these feel natural environment those environment that is built for animals.

This is over responsibility to secure them and protect them as a human.

If we behave like inresponsible will a time when these animals will disextine .

So i completely agrre with this animals should keep in wild place rather than a cage that's make them week and unsave.so zoos should be closed and animals kept in a jangals or wild place that made them free and healthy .

And we aslo encourage people or government for this purpose.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that zoos should close, and you give relevant reasons, including animals’ welfare, possible danger to visitors, and the availability of online educational material. These points address the question, but they are only partly developed. For example, you say that small spaces make animals “too week” and increase deaths, but you do not explain how captivity causes these outcomes or provide a specific example. The point about animals harming children is also brief and would benefit from evidence or explanation. To strengthen the response, develop each main reason with a clear explanation and a relevant example, and clarify how animals could be protected in suitable natural habitats after zoos close.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you begin with your position, move through reasons, and finish by restating your view and calling for action. However, the progression between ideas is not consistently clear, and most points are presented in one long opening paragraph before shorter paragraphs follow. Connections such as “one reason also” and “Now these days” are repetitive or imprecise, while “This is over responsibility” does not clearly link to the previous point. Use separate paragraphs for animal welfare, visitor safety, and alternatives to zoo visits. Within each paragraph, state one main idea, explain it, and then give an example. Clearer referencing and a small range of accurate linking phrases would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “entertainment,” “educational information,” “natural environment,” “social media,” and “protect.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to understand. For instance, “animals always truly live in wild place,” “increase the laval of death,” and “kept animals in an awild place” do not express your intended ideas clearly. There are also frequent spelling and word-form problems, such as “week” for “weak,” “definatly,” “paltform,” and “disextine.” Build a topic vocabulary set around animal welfare and conservation, and check spelling and collocations. More precise phrases would help you explain your reasons without relying on repeated words such as “animals” and “place.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express several connected ideas, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined into long, difficult-to-follow sentences, and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “I completely agree with the zoos should be closed” has an incorrect clause pattern; write “I completely agree that zoos should be closed.” In “animal are not live,” the subject and verb form do not agree, and “some animal’s have” uses an incorrect plural form. Articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing, as in the opening sentence, which runs several ideas together. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “although.” Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and full stops during revision.

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