Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people believe that nowdays people most prefers to Islands, Forgien trips, Beaches or Mountainous sites they are not interesed to visit Zoo that much, so animals in the zoo should be free and Zoos should be closed. Although keeping animals in the zoo feels like there is renetal home top them, But i totally oppose the idea or statement that zoo should be closed, i m partly agree to this statement.

On the one hand, Many people are argee to closed the zoos and set the animals free from these cages. Because animals deserve to live in their natural habitats rather than in captivity. For example, if our family keep us into the space where we provide everything easily but we have no right to cross that room boundries, in little time only our behaviour change we feel stress, depression. In the same way the animals captivity can causes stress, depression and unusal behaviour of them. Also wild animals need natural environments to survive.

On the other hand, many people are completely disagree to the statement of clossing the zoos. As zoos, wildlife sanctuaries and national parks are the some bodies made by govenments to save or protect the endengred species. They built the home in there on territory so that they feel safe and time to time every needed resources reaches to them. Another siginficate not to close these bodies are by these we can better understand the animal behaviour. People using mordern technology to film the animals, some are making documentaries on the animals to educate. In which all things about one specific animal is provided there eating habits, hunting style, bredding time favourable to that species.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that zoos shouls be closed because animals deserve t live in their natural habitat. Government should instead invest in wildlife sancturies and conservation programmes to ensure their protection.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both sides of the issue and give relevant reasons: animal welfare and the role of zoos or conservation bodies in protecting endangered species and educating the public. However, the position is not consistently clear. The introduction says you “totally oppose” closing zoos, then says you “partly agree,” while the conclusion firmly supports closing them. This makes it difficult to identify your answer to the question. Several points are also under-developed: the comparison with a family confined to one room illustrates stress, but does not explain how this applies to different zoo conditions; the conservation and education claims would benefit from a specific example. State one clear position and support it consistently with developed evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs presenting opposing views, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in perspective, so the reader can follow the broad structure. However, progression is weakened by the conflicting position in the introduction and conclusion, and some connections between ideas are abrupt. For example, the paragraph about zoos moves from conservation to filming and documentaries without clearly explaining how these points support keeping zoos open. Several sentences begin with “Because,” “As,” or “In which” but are not smoothly connected to the surrounding ideas. Use clearer topic sentences, link each example directly to its main point, and make the conclusion follow the position established at the start.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “natural habitats,” “captivity,” “endangered species,” “wildlife sanctuaries,” and “conservation programmes.” These choices show an effort to discuss animal welfare and protection, but the range is limited and frequent spelling, word-form, and collocation errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “nowdays,” “renetal home,” “unusal behaviour,” and “favourable to that species.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “some bodies made by governments” and “every needed resources reaches to them.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and choosing natural combinations such as “organisations established by governments” and “provide the resources they need.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional comparison beginning “if our family keep us…” and a contrast introduced by “Although.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For instance, “animals captivity can causes” has problems with both the possessive construction and verb agreement, while “many people are argee to closed” does not form a correct clause. The opening sentence also combines several ideas without clear grammatical control. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check that each sentence has a complete main clause and consistent punctuation.

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