Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I fully disagree with this argument, in my openion animals should be live in their own place from where they actually belong to but if any case their species are in danger their due to climate change and global warming so thats a good way to keep them in a zoo in the way to protect them from going extinct. I agree with that its a good idea to release all the animals from zoos only in one condition that you should be aware of that this animal could survive in wild forest or not. Because all of these animals are become addicted to zoos food like the food without effort so that why they bocome lazy. So they are not able to hunt more but if you want to release them you should to keep an eye on them and give some kind of lessons of hunting.

We should not be closed all zoos because it might be used for other perposes as well like as shelter home, clinic of animals where they can be treated medically and as research centre as well by get to know why these going towards extinct or danger and how can we protect them.

By keeping the zoos open it will be helpful for children to reltae with the animals , generat feeling about them and build a positive thought in their mind reltaed to animals that how much is important their existance are. Because according to the last research animals are also very essential for keep environment healthy and affordable and by that way the life-chain can work like if the large predators are died or killed then how can the small one's able to find their food because the large predators generate their food by hunting preys so the small ones comes to eat the waist of that prey and then after t absorb in soil and release nutrients for trees thats how the life-chain is working.

Example is one of big cat with big ears which is called "lynx". This cat is very popular in Britan but unfortunately they are not more there because when Britan population grown then the farmers killed that cat to protect their farm's animals but they realised after thet this cat is plays very important role to keep enviroment safe and green. And due to the lack of knowledge about zoo they become extinct there but by knowing their importance the other European countries keep it safe and gave him some particular are of land as shelter like zoo so thats how this cat is getting safe from going to extinct. Later on Britan invest many pounds to keep their land green and safe their environment but they failed then they build some zoos and a shelters for some important creatures which was essential.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the opening: you disagree with closing zoos, while recognising that animals ideally belong in their natural habitats. You address several relevant reasons, including protecting endangered species, educating children and supporting animal care or research. The lynx example also gives your argument a specific illustration. This meets the task well, but the support is uneven: the idea that zoo animals become unable to hunt is asserted rather than explained, and the discussion of zoos as shelters and clinics does not clearly show why this means they should remain open. Some claims about the lynx and environmental effects are also difficult to follow. Develop each main reason with a clearer explanation and ensure examples directly support your position; this would make the response more consistently convincing and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is an overall progression from your position, to animal protection, education and the lynx example, and paragraph breaks help distinguish these topics. However, the argument does not always move smoothly within paragraphs. The opening combines several points in one long sentence, while the paragraph beginning “By keeping the zoos open” shifts from children’s learning to food chains without a clear link. Connectors such as “Because,” “so,” and “and” are repeated, and some references—such as “this cat” and “that way”—make the relationships between ideas less clear. Give each paragraph one main purpose, use shorter sentences to show the steps in your reasoning, and choose linking phrases that express the exact relationship between claims.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary suited to the topic, including “species,” “extinct,” “predators,” “nutrients,” and “research centre,” and these choices help communicate a range of ideas. However, the range is not yet consistently controlled: several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “addicted to zoos food,” “life-chain,” and “affordable” for describing a healthy environment. Spelling errors, including “openion,” “enviroment,” and “Britan,” also distract the reader. Aim for precise, natural combinations and check spelling carefully. For example, “dependent on food provided by zoos” is clearer than “addicted to zoos food,” while “food chain” is the standard expression. More accurate topic vocabulary would make your explanations easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional ideas such as “if you want to release them” and explanations using “because.” This shows an effort to express relationships between ideas. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “animals should be live,” “their species are in danger,” and “the large predators are died or killed.” Several sentences run on, particularly the opening and the food-chain explanation, making it hard to identify the main clause. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea at a time, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms, then add subordinate clauses only when their structure is secure.

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