Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the change in some household types in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

PEOPLE IN HOUSEHOLDS BY TYPE OF HOUSEHOLD AND FAMILY

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The tabular chart illustrates change in some household types in great britain in 1971 to 2007.

The first type of household is one person.

in 1971 6 people lived in one person household whereas after 10 years in 1981 the count increases by 2% and comes out to be 8% whereas in 1991 the count faces an increament of 2% and comes out to be 11% whereas in 2001 and 2007 the count remains constant.

The second kind of household in britain is no children in 1971, the percentile of citizens having no children is 19% whereas in 1981 there is a slight increase of 1% and the count comes out to be 20% on the other hand in 1991 the number of citizens increases by 3% and turn out to be 23% whereas in 2001 there is an increase of 2% and the count becomes 25% whereas in 2007 the count of indivuals remained constant as in 2001.

The third category is dependent children

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is incomplete as it cuts off abruptly after introducing the third category, failing to provide a summary or cover all data points. While the student attempts to report figures for the first two categories, the description is repetitive and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The focus is overly narrow, listing data chronologically rather than synthesizing information or making meaningful comparisons between household types. To improve, you must ensure the entire task is completed and include an overview paragraph that highlights the most significant changes or trends across the entire period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. There is no introduction or overview, and the body paragraphs are poorly organized, focusing on a mechanical listing of data rather than grouping information logically. Cohesive devices are used repetitively (e.g., 'whereas' is used excessively and often incorrectly). The lack of a conclusion or a cohesive summary makes the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is also problematic, as the text is fragmented and ends mid-sentence. To improve, use clear topic sentences and a variety of linking words to connect ideas rather than just listing numbers.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'the count comes out to be' and 'the count remains constant' are used repeatedly, which hinders the flow of the report. There is little attempt to use academic or precise vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'increased', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable'). Spelling errors such as 'increament' and 'indivuals' are present. To improve, focus on learning synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and practice using more precise terminology for data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', or 'figure'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response relies on simple sentence structures and contains frequent grammatical errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'the count increases' when describing past data. Punctuation is also weak, with many run-on sentences and a lack of proper capitalization for proper nouns like 'Britain'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple statements. To improve, practice using complex sentences with subordinate clauses and ensure consistent use of past tenses when describing historical data.

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